As promised, the log of Rabbit riffing on my early first draft of this short. I hope this gives a few of you laughs, because I couldn't stop cracking up.
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[00:01] <%Rab_Bit> I suppose I should get to reading it
[00:01] <cereal_ata> deme: damn it, are you trying to imply something with that link?
[00:01] <%Rab_Bit> time to point out the fuckups
[00:02] <%Patch>
http://i.imgur.com/fFaL1fp.gif [00:02] <MobileSights> It's completely unfinished
[00:02] <MobileSights> But yes
[00:02] <MobileSights> Fuck ups
[00:02] <MobileSights> Find them
[00:02] <MobileSights> SLAY THEM
[00:02] <%Rab_Bit> 11: >turning to face me. Her expression is both hesitant
[00:02] <%Rab_Bit> what the fuck
[00:02] <%Rab_Bit> why does it end there
[00:02] <MobileSights> UNFINISHED
[00:02] <MobileSights> I WAS GOING TO PUT SOMETHING THERE
[00:02] <%Rab_Bit> THAT'S NOT UNFINISHED THAT'S 'FUCK SENTENCES'
[00:02] <Triplicity> patch
[00:02] <Triplicity> did you
[00:02] <Triplicity> play AC:I
[00:02] <MobileSights> I DROP THINGS AND RETURN TO THEM LATER
[00:03] <MobileSights> IF THAT GETS YOU RIP AND TEAR MAD
[00:03] <%Rab_Bit> 27: >and I relish in her yelp of surprise before I pull her in for another, deeper, kiss,
[00:03] <%Rab_Bit> WAY TOO MANY FUCKIN' COMMAS
[00:03] <%Rab_Bit> GET RID OF THE ONE AFTER 'DEEPER'
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[00:03] <%mini_Kagiyama> AND THIS IS WHY I DON'T LEAVE PROOFING UP TO THE COURT OF PUBLIC OPINION
[00:04] <FelixOvum> Rab: YOU'RE SPOILING MY AFTERGLOW, YOU TWIT
[00:04] <%Rab_Bit> GOOD
[00:04] <balistadead> Rabbutt: >pointing out sudokus
[00:04] <%Rab_Bit> FUCK YOUR AFTERGLOW
[00:04] <balistadead> it ain't even done yet mang
[00:04] <%Rab_Bit> BALISTA
[00:04] <balistadead> has it been so long that you just can't restrain yourself
[00:04] <%Rab_Bit> I AIN'T GIVE NO FUCKS
[00:04] <balistadead> and you take it out on underaged updates now?
[00:04] <%glasnost> oh boy, this again
[00:04] <balistadead> that's illegal in most developed countries you know!
[00:05] <%Rab_Bit> >I remove my shirt in a single smooth motion, exposing my barrel-esque torso. It takes a lot of work to keep it up to standard,
[00:05] <%Rab_Bit> >barrel-esque
[00:05] <%Rab_Bit> now
[00:05] <%Rab_Bit> I imagine him with a beer gut
[00:05] <%Rab_Bit> takes a lot of beer to keep it up to standard
[00:05] <FelixOvum> I always assume lanky, 5'11 protag unless stated otherwise
[00:05] <%Rab_Bit> but it was stated otherwise
[00:05] <%glasnost> oh nevermind, he did ask for it
[00:06] <%Rab_Bit> therefore, fat beergut
[00:06] <%Lion> glasnost
[00:06] <%Lion> why are mcs always average height with generic dark colored hair
[00:06] <MobileSights> SUPERTROOPER HAS NO TIME FOR BEERGUT
[00:06] <%Rab_Bit> 83: >Small breasts and perky nipples are the order of today,
[00:06] <balistadead> >beergut protag
[00:06] <balistadead> wasn't there a character in some thing
[00:06] <%Rab_Bit> The phrase is "order of the day", not "order of today"
[00:07] <%glasnost> lion
[00:07] <Triplicity> Lion: Chaika MC's hair lol
[00:07] <balistadead> who was really really obese normally, except when there was a fight he suddenly hulked out because that fat was actually "extra blood"?
[00:07] <MobileSights> I WAS TORN BETWEEN THE TWO YES
[00:07] <MobileSights> THANKS
[00:07] <%glasnost> because of your immersion
[00:07] <%Lion> chaika mc looks like a dork
[00:07] <%Patch> Trip: Did I play what now?
[00:07] <%Lion> is he a dork
[00:08] <%Rab_Bit> >I roll my eyes. "Look, I'm twice your size,
[00:08] <FelixOvum> All MCs with interesting female leads end up dull
[00:08] <FelixOvum> cept araragi
[00:08] <%Rab_Bit> IT'S BECAUSE OF ALL THE BEER YOU'VE BEEN DRINKING, MC
[00:08] <%Rab_Bit> JESUS, WHAT A FATTY
[00:08] <%Lion> what about mcs with bland female leads
[00:08] <MobileSights> Pffffff
[00:08] <MobileSights> Okay
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[00:08] <%Lion> like every key protagonist i guess
[00:08] <FelixOvum> Lion: what, you mean the tapestries?
[00:08] <FelixOvum> exactly
[00:08] <%Patch>
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jDE5gY2cEu8 Okay, the opening for the Senran Kagura cooking game is kind of fucking hilarious.
[00:08] <+Catball> YouTube Dekamori Senran Kagura - Opening Video (1:33) by 2play2gamer
[00:08] <MobileSights> Change barrel-sequel for something more chiseled, CHECK
[00:08] <MobileSights> ESQUE
[00:09] <MobileSights> MOTHERFUCKING ESQUE
[00:09] <balistadead> mobilllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllle correctionnnnns
[00:09] <MobileSights> DAMN YOU TO HELL AUTOCORRECT
[00:09] <%Lion> why isn't there a thing where the mc is cool and every girl is great
[00:09] <%Rab_Bit> >I shuck off my trousers and underwear in rapid order, exposing every last inch of myself to the night. My pasty white flab shines in the moonlight.
[00:10] <%glasnost> araragi is almost cool
[00:10] <MobileSights> Pffffffffffffffffff
[00:10] <%mini_Kagiyama> snrk
[00:10] <%Rab_Bit> >Kyouko stares at me, eyes wide. "Wow."
[00:10] <%Rab_Bit> >"I get that a lot."
[00:10] <%Rab_Bit> >She nods, unable to wrench her eyes from my package. "I should think so! You almost look like you're pregnant!"
[00:10] <MobileSights> Damn you, rabbit
[00:10] <MobileSights> DAMN YOU
[00:10] <FelixOvum> snrk
[00:10] <%glasnost> maybe if he had a fight where he didn't get the shit beaten out of him
[00:10] <%Rab_Bit> I can't stop laughing
[00:10] <MobileSights> THS IS
[00:10] <%mini_Kagiyama> hahaha oh god
[00:10] <MobileSights> I LOVE IT
[00:10] <FelixOvum> glasnost: what about in kizumonogatari
[00:10] <FelixOvum> he was 2/3 there
[00:11] <balistadead> rabbit pls
[00:11] <%Rab_Bit> >She lies below me, now, her hair spilling out onto the grass, arms protectively wrapped over her breasts. I doubt she can breathe, given that she's below me.
[00:11] <balistadead> Patch: what in the fuck
[00:11] <%glasnost> well yeah but he was a full vampire there
[00:11] <balistadead> i'm dying
[00:11] <MobileSights> I BOTH HATE AND LOVE YOU
[00:11] <%glasnost> also ssh i haven't read that yet
[00:11] <FelixOvum> okok
[00:11] <%Patch> The strongest cooking, balista
[00:11] <MobileSights> SAVE ALL THESE EDITS
[00:11] <%Patch> It's amazing
[00:11] <%Rab_Bit> >The longing in her eyes, that sheer want, gives me a fair idea of what we both want. I think she wants me to get off.
[00:11] <%glasnost> waiting for the movie ;_;
[00:11] <MobileSights> TO YOUR OWN THING
[00:11] <MobileSights> IT'S TERRIBLE
[00:11] <MobileSights> AND BEAUTIFUL
[00:11] <balistadead> >she wants me to get off
[00:11] <balistadead> dohoho
[00:11] <FelixOvum> Rab enjoys males leads with a bit of heft to them
[00:12] <%Rab_Bit> >Well, if the lady want it, far be it from me to deny her. I cautiously insert my tip into her, and my breath catches in my throat- this is the most exercise I've had since that one time I had to run to catch the ice-cream truck.
[00:12] <%Rab_Bit> also, 'wants' instead of 'want' there
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[00:12] <MobileSights> I
[00:12] <MobileSights> I can't breathe
[00:12] <MobileSights> You're killing me rabbit
[00:12] <MobileSights> you're killing me
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[00:12] <%Rab_Bit> YOUR EATING HABITS ARE KILLING YOU
[00:13] <Broand> pffft
[00:13] <MobileSights> AHAHAHAHAH
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[00:13] <%Rab_Bit> >I heave a sigh of relief. "Tell me if I'm going too fast, then."
[00:13] <%Rab_Bit> I DON'T EVEN NEED TO CHANGE THIS ONE. 'HEAVE' IS THIS MAN'S VERB.
[00:13] <MobileSights> YOU BEAUTIFUL SON OF A BITCH
[00:13] <Ghostdivision> rab
[00:13] <Ghostdivision> what the dicks are you reading
[00:13] <%Rab_Bit> CYS's porn, as modified by me
[00:14] <FelixOvum> Ghostdivision, exactly
[00:14] <MobileSights> THIS IS WHAT IT FEELS LIKE TO MST3K SOMETHING
[00:14] <Ghostdivision> oh, indeed
[00:14] <Ghostdivision> aight, coo
[00:14] <MobileSights> WHEN IT'S YOUR OWN BEING TORN APART
[00:14] <Ghostdivision> well, far be it for me to interrupt, do carry on sir
[00:14] <%Rab_Bit> >She trembles with my every motion, her breathing coming in short, staccato bursts, whereas mine are gusty, dying-animal wheezes.
[00:14] <FelixOvum> KChasm, how old are the kids
[00:14] <Broand> Glasnost he wins like 2 fights in bakemonogatari
[00:14] <FelixOvum> tchotchke
[00:14] <FelixOvum> the fuck is that even
[00:15] <Broand> so far at least
[00:15] <balistadead> >tchotchke
[00:15] <balistadead> >from yiddish
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[00:15] <FelixOvum> that's just cruel
[00:15] <balistadead> forget "from", that IS yiddish
[00:15] <%Rab_Bit> 166. >I pull back, then press forward once more, slowly repeating the motions as Kyouko tries her level best to hold steady, although her little yelps betray the effect I'n having upon her.
[00:15] <%glasnost> bro: yeah, by getting beat up
[00:15] <MobileSights> Rab
[00:15] <MobileSights> Rab
[00:15] <Broand> No
[00:15] <MobileSights> You're evil
[00:15] <%Rab_Bit> (No ms3tk here, just it's supposed to be i'm instead of i'n)
[00:15] <Broand> he does the beating up
[00:15] <MobileSights> I love it
[00:15] <Broand> he even celebrates
[00:15] <MobileSights> Oh, thanks
[00:15] <FelixOvum> Broand, you sure it's bakemono?
[00:15] <FelixOvum> and not nise?
[00:15] <%Rab_Bit> >While I hold her close with one hand around the small of her back, the other is free to roam as it wishes, and there's plenty for her to enjoy.
[00:16] <Broand> against a elementary school girl
[00:16] <%Rab_Bit> OF COURSE THERE'S PLENTY, YOU FAT FUCK
[00:16] <FelixOvum> what
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[00:16] <MobileSights> Also considering your viewing AE as fatty lard fat
[00:16] <%glasnost> okay true
[00:16] <MobileSights>
http://androidarts.com/cortexcommand/Faction_CMF/cmf_lineup.jpg [00:16] <FelixOvum> snail attacks don't count
[00:16] <MobileSights> I always pictured him as kinda the top left armored guy
[00:16] <MobileSights> So
[00:16] <FelixOvum> those occur every other episode
[00:16] <MobileSights> SPOT ON
[00:16] <%glasnost> hachikuji probably let him win though
[00:16] <MobileSights> YOU TURBOFAGGOT
[00:16] <%Rab_Bit> SPOT ON? MC CAN'T EVEN FIT INTO THAT ARMOR
[00:16] <%Rab_Bit> THERE IS NO WAY HIS WAISTLINE IS THAT THIN
[00:16] <Broand> I'm moving on into the snake chapter now
[00:17] <%Rab_Bit> POWER ARMOR QUAKES BEFORE THIS MAN'S MIGHTY GIRTH
[00:17] <%glasnost> how do you misspell paradigm
[00:17] <MobileSights> snrk
[00:17] <balistadead> paradigm isn't too hard, neither is commissar
[00:17] <FelixOvum> paradig'em
[00:17] <balistadead> what the fuck is weimaraner
[00:17] <%Rab_Bit> >Every pump is another blissful reminder of the situation my manhood finds itself in, every motion tearing another little gasp or cry from this beautiful young woman, every exertion a pain on my labored, cholesterol-clogged heart.
[00:17] <%glasnost> oh, this is the national spelling bee
[00:17] <%glasnost> bal: a dog breed
[00:18] <MobileSights> You know
[00:18] <MobileSights> Rab
[00:18] <balistadead> >dog breeds
[00:18] <balistadead> fuckin' dogs
[00:18] <MobileSights> You should totally do this in a story of your own
[00:18] <%Rab_Bit> >Her fingernails dig into my back as she grips me tightly, as if I'll float away on the breeze if she dares let go.
[00:18] <MobileSights> Just
[00:18] <%Rab_Bit> WHAT IS THIS, A FUCKIN' HURRICANE?
[00:18] <%Rab_Bit> I DOUBT A TORNADO COULD PICK UP LORD LARD HERE
[00:18] <MobileSights> Complete fat fuck
[00:18] <MobileSights> In more ways than one
[00:18] <FelixOvum> balistadead, that has been the topic for the night, yes
[00:19] <%Rab_Bit> >"F-faster," she moans, bucking her hips in tune with my own, even as I dutifully increase my pace. Her legs wrap around my waist, locking me into position.
[00:19] <%Rab_Bit> >Not that I can find much room to complain, honestly. Oh, who am I kidding? I just want this to be over. I'm sweaty, I'm gasping, and I'm pretty sure I'm going to die if I don't get 20ccs of McNuggets, stat.
[00:19] <balistadead> i'm just looking at my leadup to youmu popping out of the barrier
[00:19] <balistadead> and wanting to write lewds instead now
[00:19] <MobileSights> Rabbit, I just want you to know
[00:19] <balistadead> good job CYS
[00:19] <balistadead> scum
[00:20] <MobileSights> I hate your guts
[00:20] <%Rab_Bit> >Her every breath comes in hard and fast, now, as I pump away vigorously. My breath has long since left me. Oh, mama, I'm seeing the light! I'm coming to join you! My heart's beat its last!
[00:20] <MobileSights> You beautiful bastard
[00:20] <%Rab_Bit> >I pause, pulling back to catch my breath. Kyouko glares at me through eyes half glazed over from pleasure.
[00:20] <%Rab_Bit> I DIDN'T EVEN NEED TO CHANGE THIS LINE
[00:20] <%Rab_Bit> OF COURSE HE HAD TO CATCH HIS BREATH
[00:20] <%Rab_Bit> FAT FUCK
[00:20] <Alkarl> rab
[00:20] <Broand> mmmm
[00:20] <Broand> Half glazed
[00:21] <Alkarl> You should record this and read it off
[00:21] <MobileSights> It hurts to read
[00:21] <MobileSights> But it is a good pain
[00:21] <MobileSights> Never before has something of mine been riffed on like this
[00:21] <MobileSights> It's a nice milestone!
[00:21] <%Rab_Bit> >A piercing wail tears out of her throat, muffled only by my girth crushing the breath from her lungs.
[00:22] <MobileSights> Rab
[00:22] <%Rab_Bit> hahaha
[00:22] <MobileSights> Save all these
[00:22] <FelixOvum> seriously
[00:22] <balistadead> >implying everyone present doesn't have logs saved
[00:22] <MobileSights> I cannot
[00:22] <FelixOvum> post up the annotations after the original
[00:22] <MobileSights> Well I can't because lol mobile
[00:22] <FelixOvum> No one give him the logs
[00:22] <Broand> bed
[00:22] <MobileSights> fug u
[00:22] <%Rab_Bit> >Her shuddering motions assault my manhood, the rapid contractions of her inner walls eroding the last of my own restraint, and I lose myself in what seems to be a serious case of cardiac arrest.
[00:23] * FelixOvum claps
[00:23] <MobileSights> son of a bitch
[00:23] <MobileSights> I
[00:23] <%Rab_Bit> >Eventually, though I know not when, I return to my senses, finding my left arm to be hurting like a bitch. Yeah. Definitely a major cardiac event.
[00:23] <MobileSights> I am done
[00:23] <MobileSights> I cannot
[00:23] <MobileSights> My sides have been vaporized
[00:24] <MobileSights> THIS IS WHY NO ONE VOTES FOR YOUR PORN FOR BEING PORN, RABBIT
[00:24] <%Rab_Bit> >We lay there, the ragged wheeze of my breathing the only noise to be heard, two bodies pressed together without a care in all the world, crushing the poor girl beneath me.
[00:24] <MobileSights> YOU GOTTA FUCK IT ALL UP WITH
[00:24] <MobileSights> WITH
[00:24] <%Rab_Bit> hahaha
[00:24] <MobileSights> COMEDY
[00:24] <%Rab_Bit> "So," I eventually manage to force out, "was it good for you?"
[00:24] <%Rab_Bit> She cracks an eye open, and laughs weakly at me, barely able to draw breath from under my shuddering folds of fat. "You could say that, yeah."
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[00:25] <Alkarl> l-lewd
[00:25] <MobileSights> All this
[00:25] <%Marchosias> ( ?? ?? ??)
[00:25] <%Rab_Bit> "That was..." She breaks eye-contact, her voice dropping to little more than a whisper. "No one's ever made me feel like that. Like I was drowning."
[00:25] <MobileSights> Because I used 'barrel' as a descriptoPFFFFFFFFFFFFF
[00:25] <MobileSights> GODDAMN YOU
[00:25] <BENOIST> This is my fetish.jpg
[00:25] <%Rab_Bit> "Do you grease up beforehand or did you just sweat this much?"
[00:26] <Halaxis> CYS
[00:26] <Halaxis> CYS
[00:26] <MobileSights> I have run out of ways to express my hate/love for what you've done here
[00:26] <%Rab_Bit> >When she draws back, her smile, the happiness in her eyes, is enough to make my heart surge up with a joy I haven't felt in far, far too long. "You're stuck with me now. No, really. I think you got stuck to me. Can you even get up?"
[00:26] <Halaxis> You know what this needs? His power suit. Snarking at him.
[00:27] <MobileSights> The suit stays under wraps off missions
[00:27] <MobileSights> Hardly inconspicuous
[00:27] <Halaxis> awwww
[00:27] <MobileSights> But yes rabbit
[00:27] <MobileSights> Have his power armor tag along
[00:27] <%Rab_Bit> >Her answering giggle is light and airy, and I can't help but grin in response. Such polar opposites. Her a light-stepping waif of a girl, and I've been compared to elephants a time or two. Pregnant elephants.
[00:27] <Halaxis> "My sensors indicate that you wish to tap that"
[00:28] <MobileSights> "SHUT UP"
[00:28] <%Rab_Bit> "I can think of worse things," I murmur. "Such as, for instance, being under me. How have you not suffocated yet? Maybe we should try cowgirl next time."
[00:28] <MobileSights> why
[00:28] <MobileSights> how
[00:28] <MobileSights> damn you
[00:28] <%Rab_Bit> >"Well," I say, causing her to look up just in time to see me waggle my man-boobs obscenely. "I suppose you wouldn't be up for another round?"
[00:29] <MobileSights> FUCKER
[00:29] <%Rab_Bit> She flushes, before hiding her face against my chest. "I- can we just stay like this instead? Please? I think my legs are broken."
[00:29] <FelixOvum> I can't deal with all this parody
[00:29] <cereal_ata> what the hell is going on
[00:30] <%Rab_Bit> Holding her like this makes me feel like I could take on the world. Or, for that matter, furious McDonald's employees wanting to know just what the hell I think I'm doing. THE SAUCE WAS FREE AND I WILL PUT AS MUCH OF IT ON MY NUGGETS AS I WANT
[00:30] <%Rab_Bit> ahh
[00:30] <balistadead> sata: scroll up
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[00:30] <%Rab_Bit> oh god
[00:30] <balistadead> and be slain
[00:30] <%Rab_Bit> I think
[00:30] <%Rab_Bit> I think I'm done here
[00:30] <%Rab_Bit> and then I scrolled back to the top to see this line:
[00:30] <%Rab_Bit> >As I'm pulled through the moonlit woods by a girl half my size, I wonder how in the hell it came to this.
[00:30] <%Rab_Bit> >half my size
[00:31] <MobileSights> He is huge
[00:31] <%Rab_Bit> NO SHIT
[00:31] <%Rab_Bit> BEER AND NUGGETS FOR YEARS WILL DO THAT TO A MAN
[00:31] <MobileSights> SO PARODY ASIDE
[00:31] <%Marchosias> Whatever I stumbled into here, I give it a B+
[00:31] <MobileSights> HOW WASS MY FIRST FORAY INTO SMUT
[00:31] <%Rab_Bit> THE WORST THING I'VE EVER READ
[00:31] <cereal_ata> o-oh my!
[00:32] <%Rab_Bit> HAVE I EVER MENTIONED I ACTUALLY HATE READING SMUT
[00:32] <balistadead> rabbit hates feels
[00:32] <%Rab_Bit> I like feels
[00:32] <balistadead> they remind him of his life before death
[00:32] <%Rab_Bit> hue
[00:32] <MobileSights> I NEVER ASKED FOR THISC
[00:32] <Halaxis> > >half my size
[00:32] <MobileSights> Well okay actually I gave you the go ahead
[00:32] <Halaxis> She's what, 4 feet?
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[00:33] <%Rab_Bit> Hal: And he's a 600-pound hambeast
[00:33] <MobileSights> Figure of speech
[00:33] <Halaxis> 5 feet is the average height for eleven women
[00:33] <MobileSights> I'm allowed that much for a first person perspective
[00:33] <Halaxis> Rab_Bit: sounds like he plays Magic the Gathering
[00:33] <%Rab_Bit> I bet he does
[00:33] <balistadead> but does he do crack
[00:33] <Halaxis> Yeah. Bet the fucker munches cheetos while he plays, and gets the dust all over the sleeves
[00:33] <%Rab_Bit> okay I'ma make a pastebin of this I suppose
[00:34] <Halaxis> Bet the fucker thinks the 6th edition changes were the greatest thing ever, and whines about the removal of mana burn
[00:34] <Halaxis> I bet this fucker think Blue is the most OP color when it's clearly black because holy fuck Necropotence.
[00:35] <MobileSights> THANKS RAB