I decided to have fun and do a self-contained little something. Very likely with daily updates. And yes, as you might expect from the title, this story draws from other things. No, you needn’t have read it to know what’s going on nor in order to participate. Things should either be self-explanatory or anything that’s essential to know will get quality™ exposition to fill the reader in. The idea, as always, is to cut loose and enjoy the energetic spirit of things.
I’d appreciate comments in general, particularly when voting, as they help keep me fueled for the quick pace of things. I’ll be forthright and say that I may pick outcomes not only based on number of votes but if anything was said too. And even if a vote doesn’t win, I’ll try to work in stuff from reader comments if it makes sense to include. Not to mention that, in case of a tie, I may go with whatever reasoning in the comments that seems the most fun. So don’t be shy and say whatever comes to mind! Feel free to reply to your peers. The idea is to encourage engagement instead of just going through the motions. Anti-democratic, I know, but whenever you get around to writing a silly story with fast updates, you’ll get up to make up the rules.
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A yawn forced itself from my mouth, catching me off guard. A pleasant nap would have gone a long way before we set out but there was no helping it anymore.
“Look alive now!” Suika laughed and poked me in the ribs as she passed up ahead of me, her steps quick and bouncy. It amazed me that she was so light on her feet, given the large pack she carried on her back. It looked like she was carrying half of the camping supplies all by herself without even so much as breaking a sweat.
As if guessing my thoughts, she began to whistle a cheery tune as she zoomed to the front of the group. A drinking song, really, but the others didn’t know that. They seemed to find her good humor infectious and, all across the staggered column, conversation and laughter sprang forth.
Despite feeling just a little touchy … because reasons, a smile bloomed on my lips as well. Yeah, Suika had it right. It was a lovely day and, even though we had started out at the crack of dawn, I wasn’t feeling that tired. It was impossible to feel tired surrounded by nature like we were, with the deep green of the forest providing refreshing shade from the ever-intensifying sun. As we had stopped going uphill some time ago, the going wasn’t too bad. We’d arrive sooner rather than later.
I tugged at the straps of my own backpack and shifted the weigh a little more on my right side as I had been favoring the left for the last half hour. As I wiped off a little bit of sweat that had trickled down my brow, I briefly made eye contact with a very indifferent young lady. It was clear that she was super indifferent because she made a show of turning her head and pointing her nose up towards the sky. A preposterously out-of-place haughty gesture.
Marisa, who was walking besides the person who couldn’t care any less about me, caught the little exchange and offered a silent giggle, one that also seemed to say, “Oh, looks like there’s trouble in paradise.”
I proffered a grin as a reply, one that I hoped said, “That’s just the way things go.”
I let the distance between us increase a little as I fell back into the rest of the group. I watched as Suika enthusiastically led from the front, having fallen into a conversation with the now-scowling class rep. It seemed like Reimu was wasting her breath by telling the troublemaker to be on her best behavior. She must have seen the stupid expression I was making as she stuck out her tongue at me before getting back to the one-sided conversation with Suika.
The perceptive Marisa caught that one too. With doe-like eyes, she seemed to tell me that she was still on my side no matter what the others thought. Or maybe not. Tossing in an impish wink, she turned to her neighbor, very clearly meaning to talk about me and find out what was going on.
I fell back further, deciding to enjoy the soft breeze that blew up from ahead. The rest of my classmates seemed oblivious to the whole exchange. They were excited. And who could blame them? We were almost there, after all. A few days all by ourselves without having to worry about work and study at a secluded camp. Not only was the area around the lake beautiful but the night sky in the area was famous for being clear, seeing as we were sufficiently far from the city. Star-gazing and … if I recalled correctly, a meteor shower would likely happen in a few days. A pretty special occurrence. And opportunity.
I stopped walking and stood off to one side of the trail. I pretended to take my duties as a student representative (or would-be one) seriously, acting like I was doing a headcount and making sure that everyone was still with the group.
Kaenbyou narrowed her eyes as she passed, offering a silent (and rather self-satisfied) rebuke. She saw through my bullshit. She spoke to her friend, Okuu, quietly, conspiratorially, likely meaning to get my goat.
By contrast, when Kagerou passed, she looked uneasy and didn’t even seem to notice me. It was a little too warm for her to be wearing a sweater, I thought.
A group of boys followed Kochiya and Kawashiro, not really getting the hint that they were basically eavesdropping and being rude. Behind them were a few of the newer transfers, like Yamashiro, who looked to be in their element and were fully dressed in outdoors clothes that looked similar to combat fatigues.
Way behind everyone else were some of the newer “troublemakers” that had horned in on the shtick I had going on with Suika. That is to say, being lovable rascals. Or, according to certain prudes, being delinquents. While I could claim to be a free spirit that was just misunderstood, they leaned into their image a little too hard, having “lackeys” and making all sorts of nonsense declarations about territory.
“And another thing, Kenji,” one of the “bosses” snarled as she passed by, “I’m counting on you to be on your toes. No telling what sort of nonsense the others are going to try to pull at camp”
Cleverly, I avoided making eye contact with any of them. Audaciously, I turned my attention to the riotously short skirt Aya had chosen to wear that day; there was a good visual contrast between her slender, pale, and shapely legs and the dark pleated material. Wisely, I only stole sidelong glances, pretending to still be doing my duties and watching over the group while admiring Aya’s nimble movements and how she effortlessly went back and forth between groups. She prided herself on being clued-in on everything that went on and was almost always hard at work. I watched her as she happily snapped countless pictures of the group, surely intent on squeezing out as many stories about our trip for the school paper as she could later.
With another yawn, I decided to get a move on again. I was looking forward to making it to camp.
[] Return to the front and merrily help lead the way.
[] Catch up with Kochiya and the rest from the other classes.
[] Hang back with Aya and see if she has any juicy info to share.
[] Tenshi option
Ah, you beautiful, beautiful man. I'd harboured a wish that the relevant story might return somehow, having never given it the fair shake it deserved when it was running. Well, I'm here and shaking now.
>indifferent [redacted magician]
Woah, there, slow down. I can only get so erect.
>lake foreshadowing
I'm onto you, bud.
If there's no 'jump in the lake' vote, I riot.
>Kagewoo
I wonder if [redacted MC] will develop/has developed a fine enough sense to know that hairier is better.
>A group of boys followed Kochiya and Kawashiro
What can I say? I like slugs and turtles.
>Yamashiro
in b4 mountain ninja shenanigans
>having “lackeys” and making all sorts of nonsense declarations about territory
Oh? Oh? Could it be?
>“And another thing, Kenji,” one of the “bosses” snarled as she passed by, “I’m counting on you to be on your toes. No telling what sort of nonsense the others are going to try to pull at camp”
I'd like an order of sides, because mine achieved escape velocity spotting that. It took me a second, but goddamn did that hit. Bravo.
Also, I goddamn well expect some dragon-turtle and lamb. Rioting will occur if my demands are not met.
>Aya legs
caw caw...
Yeah, fuck it, you hooked me. I'm going full simp mode.
[x] Tenshi option fuck you you can't stop me [x] Hang back with Aya and see if she has any juicy info to share.
But, more seriously, I wish to caw caw with a crow and get the answers to important questions. For instance: where the lamb at?
By the way, good to see the newerhus are getting included, too. I look forward to a new round of youthful shenanigans.
>>69172 >“And another thing, Kenji,” one of the “bosses” snarled as she passed by, “I’m counting on you to be on your toes. No telling what sort of nonsense the others are going to try to pull at camp”
>I'd like an order of sides, because mine achieved escape velocity spotting that. It took me a second, but goddamn did that hit. Bravo.
Okay, I'll bite, what's the reference there? The only "Kenji" I can think of in the context of a high-school romancey setting is the crazy guy from Katawa Shoujo (I was going to say "and the guy from Persona", but then I realised I was fusing the names "Ken" and "Kanji" together in my mind), and I don't think that's what you're going for. Was there some old THP story with a Kenji in it?
I have no idea what this is a reference too or spin off of but fuck it I'm down to ball.
[X] Hang back with Aya and see if she has any juicy info to share.
Also lets get in our mob boss bag and ask her to infiltrate the Marisa convo. What's the point of having girls talk about you if you don't know what they're saying?
>>69176 Now, now, no need to be a prick about it.
I recognised Kenji, myself; but I haven't backread everything in the story list either, so I also didn't recognise the Theater reference.
I should probably get around to reading that one at some point, though.
So, choices.
Front: Suika & Reimu
Kochiya: Sanae, Nitori and Takane
Aya: CHICKEN THIGHS & a bit of everyone/juicy gossip.
Tenshi: Why is there empty space here.
Can't say I'm not tempted by the Sanae group, Nitori is always a plus in my books.
But I'm gonna agree with the others and approach leg get the word on the street.
[X] Hang back with Aya and see if she has any juicy info to share.
>>69174 >>69178 Yeah, guess I should have stated that it's >>44424 but that was a long-running and somewhat complicated story with a lot happening so didn't want to scare prospective readers off by making them think that they needed to be familiar with all that. The gist of things is that it's kinda tongue-in-cheek and a celebration of tropes and school stories (with a lot of anon being anon while voting).
Oh and I guess I should add that part of the charm of ToY back in the day (at least for me) is that there's plenty of opportunities to speak to different characters and their story lines. No one vote or choice will decide that and there'll be another chance down the line usually. So don't worry about getting locked in or missing out on characters most of the time. I used to make fun of anon for that; it's a way more cumulative thing over many updates that nudges things here and there. Always a good thing to have variety and take it easy.
>>69176 >>69174 here – thank you for the clarification, I am somewhat familiar with ToY but I hadn't read that one yet.
Anyway, actual vote time, I'm going to go with:
[X] Catch up with Kochiya and the rest from the other classes.
I agree with the idea of >>69180 and others that it's interesting to involve newer characters like Takane.
I've got to get to writing otherwise I won't have time to later. Since it's tied and think both are fine choices and there's good reasons posted for both, I'm falling back on chance: Heads for Kochiya et al, the other is for a feathery tail.
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Before too long, the group came out of the woods and onto the crest of a gently rolling hill, one that sloped downwards towards a large lake. Sunlight reflected off the blue waters made the scene a little dazzling and many in the group stopped to admire the watery expanse before them—the farthest shore seemed to be in a little bit in a haze but it otherwise looked like a pristine natural environment with only a few wooden buildings off in the distance, nestled between the trees that otherwise covered the area. Already the head of the group was well on their way down the hill, following the path towards the water’s edge.
Aya had perched herself on a large exposed boulder that was wedged between the lip of the hill and the forest. She was taking panoramic shots with her camera, a faint smile on her lips as she adjusted the exposure.
“Beautiful, right?” she spoke without breaking away from her photography as I found my footing next to her.
“Sure. It’s nice to get out of town every now and again,” I said.
At that she laughed, bringing the camera down and replacing the cap on the lens. With her usual lack of shame, she corrected the record, “I meant my legs. Caught you staring earlier.”
“They’re good too,” I shrugged, knowing better than to deny it.
“Wore this skirt just for you, you know.”
“Liar.”
“Who can say?” she shrugged and placed her camera into a protective case that hung around her neck. With surprising swiftness, she hopped off of the vantage point and onto the path again in a single motion; neither skirt nor dark, medium-length hair seemed to flutter much. She watched as I climbed down rather less graciously; my backpack encumbered my movements and so I took my time to make sure that I didn’t trip and fall flat on my ass. Her voice was flat as expressed what to a stranger might sound like an afterthought, “I did want to get your attention at some point for whatever it’s worth.”
“… You want me to help you find something out from someone who knows better than to talk to you? Is that about right?”
Aya had asked me to work for her on other occasions, paying me to act as a set of eyes and ears as I was one of the few who pretty much came and went as I pleased. I was no stranger to cutting class and also prided myself in not being involved in any clubs. Sure, I had been press-ganged into service by an unscrupulous authority figure but that was a different matter entirely. I was a neutral party and had a knack for getting to the bottom of things, even if it was more because I was direct and stubborn rather than clever and ingratiating. Or was that the other way around? Either way, I gave as good as I got. And that got me by. Usually.
“Hm, I guess you would be cranky. Heard you got into a lover’s spat earlier.”
I laughed and placed my hand on her shoulder. The material of her blouse was rather light and felt smooth against my fingers. I leaned close to her and pressed my forehead to the side of her head. I had thought to make a nonsensical joke about her being jealous but, instead, I found it hard to hide my surprise, “Since when do you wear that sort of flowery perfume?”
“It’s all for your benefit,” she brushed me off, gently banging up against my forehead with the side of her head and taking my hand off of her shoulder. Before letting go of my hand she did smile—perhaps a little too sweetly. “It’s okay if you don’t want to talk about it, I respect your privacy.”
“Since when?”
“Always. Not my fault you don’t understand my pure intentions.” she said. Aya began to walk down the path slowly, biding me to come along with a playful look she tossed with a turn of her head over her shoulder.
We were far from the back of the group and were basically afforded a private stroll together. I couldn’t say that I minded it much as I did enjoy spending time with Aya—in her own (admittedly, abnormal) way, she was the most honest person that I knew. If she wanted something from me, she’d ask. And if I wanted something from her, I could also ask. Terms could then be negotiated.
“You know, that girl from the track and field club is wearing short shorts. Nice legs there as well,” I tried to get a rise out of her.
“Momiji certainly caters to unconventional sorts of tastes,” she retorted, sounding overall indifferent to the provocation. Her eyes narrowed as she spotted the athlete in question up ahead, talking to one of the people in survivalist-style clothes. Pausing for a moment, her sharp eyes swept over me, sizing me up. “So, you don’t want to tell me about your own problems?”
“And see you write up an article on it? No thanks>”
“Not sure how you’re going to get what you want otherwise.”
“And what is it that I want?”
“What everyone who comes to me wants. Information.”
“I could always go to Himekaidou for that.”
“That shut-in stayed at home,” she recited that fact with undisguised satisfaction.”Besides, I’ve always been better at sussing out the truth.”
“That confidence of yours is why I love you.”
“Now who’s the liar?” she giggled, a light ripple of color coming to her cheeks. “Then again, I guess I should expect as much coming from a politician.”
“Am I really a politician if I didn’t want the job and no one voted for me?”
“As a journalist, I just report the facts.”
“Well, assuming both things are true, then our casual relationship is pretty inappropriate.”
“On the contrary,” Aya beamed, grabbing me by the arm, “it’s one built on mutual respect!”
Well, whatever else the truth might be, we at least seemed to have a mutual understanding. She was quick and incisive and I appreciated that more than I would admit to her face. And I was sure that she liked me for other reasons that weren’t purely transactional. At times we may have gotten on each other’s nerves but those were, ultimately, short-lived affairs.
“So, want me to try to get you a bigger budget from the student council?” I guessed that that was the sort of thing she’d want in exchange for information.
“… It would make my life easier but no,” Aya shook her head. She clung onto my arm and spoke quietly. It was a slightly too hot out for her to be pressed against me but I didn’t mind the feeling at all. If anyone up ahead bothered to look back, the might have thought us a happy couple enjoying a little alone time. “I do want your help with something but I’m not sure what it is yet. When the time comes, I’ll ask. I have a feeling that there’s something more to this trip than meets the eye….”
It was my turn to laugh again. Aya looked up at me, perplexed. I didn’t address it, instead keeping the thought to myself. How could I admit to her that I thought it endearing that, at the end of the day, she really did think herself a serious journalist? She’d just think I was making fun of her and counter with a barb. But, well, I was content to be one of the few to know that she really did have an earnest side and that it was pretty cute.
I hoped that none of those thoughts showed on my face. I decided to ask her about something else, to deflect for the time being.
[] Was there anything besides journalistic instinct that made her suspect something more was going on?
[] She probably interviewed everyone when we set off, anything that would interest me?
[X] Was there anything besides journalistic instinct that made her suspect something more was going on?
I agree with >>69206's logic that this plot-y option seems more interesting and unpredictable than the more generic gossip of the other option. Though, I also think that >>69209's idea of politicking with the beast gangs sounds interesting if an opportunity comes up for it in the future.
[x] She probably interviewed everyone when we set off, anything that would interest me?
Even if it's a 'plot' thread, this is basically ToY, so it'll only matter as much as Aya is concerned, in all likelihood. So, sure, probably fun to chase, but what I liked about ToY was the openness and variety — when anon wasn't going tinfoil-hat over bullshit — so I'm going to juke the bird for the moment and run at the new shiny instead.
Besides, maybe Aya heard something regarding a certain redacted magician that our redacted protagonist might want to hear.
Alright, calling it here in order to be able to write. Don't want to flip a coin again, slightly more persuaded by the supporters of the first (and maybe because I wrote a story titled Bait). The other choice wasn't really a springboard for inciting gang wars. That said, I think I have to do a better job with the wording for these, sorry. It takes me a stupidly long amount of time to think of the wording for the choices as-is.
The best I could do on the spot was a little predictable. I whispered, affecting a conspiratorial air, sure that she would be delighted at my flair for the dramatic, “Do you have anything besides a hunch? An anonymous source?”
“It’s just that things are a little too convenient,” Aya whispered back. Playing along, she stole a look to the left and then to the right and searched for non-existent eavesdroppers. She let go of me and hurried her pace, before stopping and once again turning to face me. “Just think about it, how did we manage to get the only lodgings around the lake so cheap and having to book months in advance? Didn’t you feel anything off when you were discussing this with Reimu?”
I, of course, knew why everything had fallen into place so easily. I could just give her the scoop that she wanted and she’d probably love me for it. Still, it wasn’t up to me. I repeated the same lie I had told early on, about how Suika had wanted to go out drinking somewhere different and we had decided to camp out, only to hear about a lodge that had been closed for renovations and wasn’t fully open for business. And someone overheard and suggested the cost be split … before we knew it, it became an informal school trip. Reimu had been annoyed at having to organize some of the logistics but the promise of good food had won her over quickly.
If she sensed that I was lying, Aya played it cool. As we had caught up to the group again, she resumed her previous work of observing the others and taking photographs every now and again. I didn’t mind her leaving me out in the cold, content to watch her slender figure move gracefully back and forth, blowing around the area like so many gusts of wind.
We reached the camp soon enough.
The mountain that dominated the area looked even more impressive from the shore opposite to its base. It was a large, but supposedly dormant, volcano that could be seen even from town. I knew that somewhere among those slopes, in the less craggy areas, there was a large shrine and a lake. I had gone there once years before, riding the cable car and seeing the larger lake that was in front of me off in the distance. Of course, getting there had been easier and hadn’t required a hike as paved roads snaked through valleys and foothills to reach the area.
A cool breeze came on in over the water and relieved some of the fatigue that I had felt from the trek. I began to look around and get my bearings around the camp.
There were a few small wooden cabins in a clearing by the shore that were fairly textbook in terms of accommodations. They were all centered around common areas that included bathrooms and a small lodge that sat right by the water. A small pier extended just beyond that into the lake, hosting a few small rowboats that had seen better days.
Already there were people out exploring every corner of the area, splitting off into groups and chatting excitedly among themselves. A few of my fellow classmates had taken off their shoes and were wading into the lake and laughing, drawn in by the allure of surely-refreshing water. It seemed like it was everything everyone expected and more.
From the distance, I recognized Marisa standing at the water’s edge. She was watching the others play around, wearing a large and floppy hat that was no doubt meant to keep the sun off her face and neck. Her long blonde hair spilled beneath the dark hat about halfway down her back, where it was tied into a small bunch by a delicate ribbon. I hadn’t noticed earlier but she had changed how she wore her hair yet again. As if guessing that she was being watched, she looked around, saw me, and gave a little wave, holding onto the brim of her hat with a hand so that the wind didn’t send it flying. Someone else, a girl with long dark pigtails came up to her and said something, causing Marisa to turn away and start up a conversation.
There was no sign of Suika nor of … well, no point in worrying about her when she wasn’t worried about me.
I caught sight of something unexpected as I walked towards the shore: tall, weather-worn walls and the hint of a large structure beyond perhaps a kilometer or two from our camp site where a small peninsula formed. I couldn’t tell what it was at a distance but it looked like some sort of old-style hotel or mansion but it looked abandoned or, at the very least, currently vacant. Old growth forest covered the approach along land, dark and dense.
An irritated yell came from the front of the lakeside lodge. Reimu was trying to get a few of the people who had volunteered to help set things up at the camp to help out. Predictably, they were quick to disappear from sight and preferred to play around as someone else did all of the hard work. Only one of the more helpful girls … the one wearing loud tourist-y-type shorts … had stuck around but even she was having a difficult time dealing with Reimu’s mounting frustration. Not that the frustration was unreasonable—she’d understandably rather be sitting around carefree dipping her toes in the water than having to do work. That work was foisted upon her was annoying.
If she saw me, I was sure that I’d get drafted for drudgery right away.
[] Join Marisa; the lake’s siren song is impossible to resist.
[] Join Reimu; a little self-immolation would appease the gods.
[x] Join Marisa; the lake’s siren song is impossible to resist.
Yeah, on the one hand, Aun, but, on the other hand, TWO magicians...!
Bless Teru for bringing to life the summer camp experience we never had. (Even if it's just a week or two away from snow season.)
[x] Join Reimu; a little self-immolation would appease the gods.
Okay, so, I'm backtracking on what I said sort of, but hear me out: there's time to jump in the lake later.
>>69241 You're referring to my mentioning 'backtracking'? I kind of implied in my vote on the first post that I would vote for the 'jump in the lake' option if it showed up. No votes being replaced here.
>>69243 Apologies, it didn't register with me that you could be referring to something before the current vote, so I just read it like you were changing your mind about a vote you made for the current choice.
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I set my bag down a few meters away from the water’s edge. I was in fairly good shape, I thought, but the cross-country hike had worn me down more than I cared to admit. At once I felt more limber and, obviously enough, unencumbered. I was enjoying the relief as I approached Marisa and was stretching my arm and shoulders when the girl with her clammed up. At that Marisa wrinkled her nose and adjusted her large hat again, guessing that I was nearby.
“Hiya,” she greeted with a smile, her usual chipper self. Her light-colored eyes turned up to look at me in the face, alight with a twinkle of irreverence. “I missed talking with you while we walked. There was something I wanted to tell you at breakfast but you were gone.”
“Um … maybe I should leave?” the girl with the dark pigtails ventured quietly, averting her eyes from either of us. She stood over a head above Marisa but, then again, nearly almost everyone did at least as much. I hadn’t met the pigtailed girl before and offered a fairly standard greeting. She seemed to be taken aback at being talked to directly and looked to Marisa in hopes of guidance.
“No need,” Marisa said with a laugh. The tight blonde braid that rand down the left side of her face to her chest jiggled—I was glad that it was still there—and she lubricated the interaction with typical aplomb, “this is the person I was telling you about. The one who helped me out in the past.”
“After you ran away from home…?” catching herself, the girl put a small hand to her mouth, thinking she committed a faux pas. Her dark eyes drooped towards to the rocky ground below.
“It’s a little more complicated than that,” I spoke up, trying to make things less awkward. Marisa didn’t really mind talking about all of that anymore but it wasn’t something that outsiders could easily understand. It was easier to be cheery and show everyone that things were alright at present. “But yeah, I helped her out. Or at least I think I did. She’s helped me back a million times over since.”
“His aunt also really an amazing person, I’ll tell you about her some other time,” Marisa chirped, broadcasting her feelings directly so that she wouldn’t be misunderstood. It wasn’t something that an outsider could understand casually—straightforward as she tended to be, Marisa also had a tenderness to her that was best understood by actions and not with words.
“Oh,” the girl said simply.
Moving things along in typical fashion, Marisa introduced the girl, “This is Narumi. She’s expressed interest in joining the magic club that I set up.”
“Ah, yes, pleased to meet you,” the girl gave a nervous bow, her conservative ankle-length dress fluttering thanks to the wind. Though I had been a little out of it lately, barely attending classes, I would have remembered a new transfer student. Her excessive bashfulness made me conclude that she was an underclassmate. I wondered how it was that she had managed to come along. It wasn’t like the trip had been advertised beyond out year.
“A pleasure,” I answered with a nod and slight smile. I was going for “nice but a little mysterious” for the first impression. I told her my name but ended on a familiar refrain, “Everyone calls me Arc. There’s no need for formality.”
“Arc has helped me get materials for my experiments. It’s not exactly easy to get laudanum these days, you know,” Marisa said cheerily. She was a resourceful person but she wouldn’t be so far along in her “magical studies” if I hadn’t also allowed her to do as she pleased at home, borrowing or asking of me all sorts of things. The less she knew how I got her things, the better, I had decided a long time ago. I just found it difficult to say no to her.
“So he’s pretty reliable…” Narumi stared at my face, as if trying to find something that had been carefully hidden away. Catching herself, she quickly added, “I mean, of course a friend of Marisa’s would be reliable. After all, she’s really helped me out of many a jam.”
“Tried the water yet?” I asked no one in particular. For the better part of the last few minutes, the gentle lapping of water upon the shore had been on the back of my mind. A few others had been busy splashing around all the while, not having bothered to change into swimsuits.
“It looks a little cold,” Narumi said.
“I was waiting for you to start playing around,” Marisa said, “either you or Alice.”
“… Well, I wasn’t planning to go swimming just yet. But I wanted to at least dip my toes.”
“Go ahead,” the blonde egged me on, “get in there.”
Taking the hint, I left the nervous underclassmate and Marisa to finish their own conversation. I took off my boots, socks, and rolled up my trousers to just below my knees. The small stones beneath my feet were smooth and cold, still moist from when waves had passed over them. I took a step and then another and was soon ankle-deep into the water. I closed my eyes and enjoyed the cool sensation.
I marched on until my shins were submerged. It was an undoubtedly refreshing sensation and, if I hadn’t been wearing clothes, I might have well continued until the mostly still waters were up to my chin. Things felt just right, like being welcomed back home by an old friend who had been eagerly anticipating my arrival all day. Whatever else might happen during the trip, I at least felt like it would have been worth it to be so relaxed, accepting the gentle homecoming.
I felt at peace.
[] Share the moment with Marisa.
[] Think of those who could use more whimsy in their lives.
Time remaining: ::Timer ended at: 2023/11/05 (Sun) 16:00
A timer because I feel I'm being a little too inconsistent with calling things. Let me know if more time is needed.
I really need to get back to reading ToY so I can fully understand what happened with Marisa; I petered out somewhere just after she made a dash out of Arc's window.
But, yeah, pretty much guessed Narumi would be unremarkable. Hard to say much about her in the best of times. Ah well, I guess we'll get more chances for lion-dog elsewhere.
>Things felt just right, like being welcomed back home by an old friend who had been eagerly anticipating my arrival all day.
Lake-san, I...
As to the vote, hmm... I think I'm going to continue to push for variety, just out of principle.
[x] Think of those who could use more whimsy in their lives.
Arc is, after all, a whimsical guy who can't help spreading whimsy every which way like a pack of route-fixated anons in a heavily VN-ish CYOA.
Well, Narumi's definitely cute, but the dog would've been cuter.
No matter. As mentioned she'll show up again. Probably.
Sharing the moment with Marisa when the introvert friend is still standing right next to her seems kinda mean.
So, instead I agree we should embrace chaos spice up the life of those who need it.
Maybe that just means singling out Narumi instead, but that's fine.
It'll be a way to break the ice if it turns out that way.
[X] Think of those who could use more whimsy in their lives.
>>69255 here.
Absolute idiot move, but I realised I forgot something right as I hit reply, so sorry for the double post.
I just wanted to add that I think the timer is good.
It means people know what's up and gives you whatever time you need to write.
So, keep it as long as you need/want, I'd say.
Have no opinion either way on the timer setting, though.
Maybe others have a stronger opinion, but if you ask me just adjust it as you, yourself, see fit.
[X] Think of those who could use more whimsy in their lives.
I agree with the other anons that the variety option is more interesting; Marisa is nice enough but she has plenty of screentime across THP – including in the original ToY. With this option it is also more unpredictable what we will come across.
On another topic, I'm curious about the "mansion or hotel" mentioned in the previous update. On the one hand, its location on the lakeside suggests it might be the SDM, but on the other hand its description as looking abandoned sounds more like the Prismriver mansion, so I wonder which one it is. I think we should go investigate that if an opportunity for it arises.
>>69258 Leaning on meta-knowledge of the author here, but I'm pretty sure it's neither of those. Given everything about ToY, I'd bank on it being inspired in some way by an old eroge. At the very least, I'm pretty sure it ain't the Prismrivers' mansion, because our resident moon-man doesn't care about them. Also, the EoSD cast was pointedly given (with maybe a certain exception or two [my memory is slightly hazy]) a reduced role in ToY, so I doubt it's the SDM, either.
But, y'know, I'm sure it'll come up sooner or later, given its looming presence.
Embarrassingly, despite the timer, I've been busy and haven't been able to write properly yet. Undermined my own schedule, sorry.
But I did want to take a moment to point something out that I thought ought had been fairly obvious: this is a choice primarily about Marisa. How could it not be if the previous choice that won explicitly named her, if the whole update also involved her? To go engage with a character and then ... not is just silly. It would be a huge waste of time and foment inconsistency and reward kneejerk voting (exemplified by "I don't like X character so Y instead!"). Nothing could ever really meaningfully happen if there's no ensured follow-through. If I wasn't keeping to a daily schedule I'd consider rewording the choices and calling for another vote because it's not at all what people seem to expect. Certainly this is on me for doing a poor job in wording things. I apologize and I'll try to do better on that front in the future.
>>69260 I mean, that's not really your fault. Speaking for myself, I try to notice things when reading, but stuff like the actual context of choices tends to miss me by a country mile. I feel like I should be asking clarification... but I never know what I should ask about, because I simply don't know what I don't know. I mean, I'm not sure what the alternative is.
And just to be clear, I'm not bitching here. I just don't know what the happy middle is.
I agree with >>69261 No need to beat yourself up over it, Teruyo.
I actually read it more as a Marisa vs. Narumi thing, but clearly I was mistaken.
I don't really have a satisfactory solution, either, but maybe it's better to sometimes just not include a choice when the flow of the story makes sense?
Just a "to be continued".
Maybe you disagree with taking away player/reader agency, but that's just my immediate thoughts on the matter; because I do agree with your point about, in this case, going to see Marisa and then just going nope after we get there.
I'm also just not really a fan of "voting against" characters just because you don't like them, personally. I always try to weigh all options against each other, myself. But, yeah, there's no need for you to apologise.
>>69262 While I agree that the wording of this question ended up being confusing, I'm not sure if it fits for this story to have vote-less updates, because the ToY/PoY paradigm as Teruyo explained it has always been to have small, fast updates with choices that may not have a big effect immediately but do add up over time.
>“So he’s pretty reliable…” Narumi stared at my face, as if trying to find something that had been carefully hidden away.
Trying to start some shit from the very first conversation? This bitch is stone cold!
I missed the vote but I would've gone with [x] Think of those who could use more whimsy in their lives., 'cause she does seem busy with Narumi at the moment.
I think life is kicking the shite out of our dear writer, as it is unfortunately wont to do.
In the meantime, I suppose we can throw around crackpot theories about the story based on what limited info has been presented.
I think Yuyuko arranged the whole thing in order for Arc to... do something. Resolve some kind of inconvenient issue for the school, maybe? Maybe investigate fellow trouble students whilst engaging in bonding?
...well, that's basically ToY in a nutshell, but... I dunno. I'm grasping at straws.
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I apologize for the lack of updates. A few pressing and unignorable things have happened in the last few weeks to me which, coupled with extended illnesses, have left me thoroughly drained of energy as well as mentally and emotionally exhausted. I didn't say anything earlier because I would have preferred to have more concrete news about resuming the story but by now any sort of sign of life is overdue.
I'll only start up this story again once I'm more or less sure that I can return to daily updates; there is a tempo to the story that is fundamental to its identity that I wish to maintain. That may be in a few days or it may be in weeks—I'd rather sooner than later but I honestly can't predict when it will be. It'll depend on external factors allowing me enough time to write as well as attaining a little peace of mind, energy, and physical wellness. Sorry once again, I know it sucks for all involved, but I hope that you'll wait warmly all the same.
I have nothing but THIS LAKE, and I want nothing more. It has been, it still is, faithful to me.
[x] Share the moment with Marisa
I mean like...she's here. She's available. Might as well bond with her a bit. Besides, Marisa gives off such powerful friend vibes that there's no way anyone would ever fall in love with her, so might as well milk this moment for all it's worth.
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I was alone for a little while, letting the outside world come to me in fits and starts; peals of laughter in the distance provided a warm tickle that contrasted with the coolness of the water; the sound of Marisa’s quick and carefree patter helped my fatigue wash away; the sunlight that bled through my closed eyelids made me aware of how my own energy would eventually want to burst forth. For several moments, I let those sensations come and go, enjoying the gulps of pristine air as I breathed calmly through it all.
After some time, I was aware of a pair of eyes resting upon my back, though I couldn’t tell what it was she was thinking. As forward and bold as she tended to usually be, she still clung strongly to her mysteries and whimsies. Magic was certainly a fitting interest for her. More than once I had thought that there was more to her club than a girlish fascination for esoteric truth. My own involvement, and how she cheerily egged me on, felt like it might be a ritual in of itself—an induction into the deep secrets of her enigmatic heart.
“Water’s fine,” I said without turning around, “come on in and join me.”
“I don’t want to take off my shoes just yet,” Marisa replied, “gonna have to make it to the camp right after.”
“I bet that if I turn around, I’ll find them already off. You’re just trying to surprise me.”
“Ha, am I that predictable?” she laughed. Though it had been several months since … well, it was difficult to even think about. The other reality was best forgotten. Hearing her untroubled, cheeky even, was far more preferable.
“Come on,” I said with more firmness, trying to banish those darker memories decisively. I turned, finding that she had indeed taken off her shoes and socks and already stood with her petite feet at the water’s edge. Her toes tapped playfully on the surface of the water, causing minute ripples on the otherwise calm surface. With my eyes on her, she began to splash the water rhythmically. As she did so with exaggerated effort, she leaned upon the balls of her feet, exposing the pale and unblemished flesh of her soles.
Seeing that she kept still, hesitating with playful coyness, I took a few steps towards her. That wasn’t enough to get her moving either. She looked at me dumbly, eyes wide open and a curl on her lips that produced an expression that could be best described as simpering. A smile threatened to bloom on my own lips as I was keenly aware of what was probably going on; I spotted the trap and nonetheless pressed recklessly onward. With sharpened eyes I extended my arms towards her and, thus so thoroughly ensnared by her maidenly act, degraded myself further by initiating contact; I grabbed her hand and firmly, but gently, tugged at her, inviting her in again with manly confidence. To that, she yielded, at once becoming pliable, and insufferably demure; the smile on her lip may have turned abashed but it also was pleasant and docile. There was no longer any chance of escape.
“Ah, it’s pretty cold!” she squeaked, coming closer to me with lighthearted glee. She held in her other hand her large hat, as if suddenly deciding that the wide-brimmed thing might obscure her vision of me and the lake—not an unreasonable thing to think, given that she was much shorter than I was. Her hat would otherwise hit my shoulder and keep her at a non-figurative arm’s length distance. Still gleefully squeaking, she added, “Aren’t you embarrassed to keep pulling me in like this?”
“What’s the worst that could happen?” I answered her insincere question, “There’ll be rumors about me again? There’s already all sort of gossip, always has been, about me. I don’t give a shit.”
“I know,” she said, letting herself be pulled as close as I pleased. Marisa stood next to me in a shallow part of the water, her hand firmly in mine. That it was a little sweaty, just the slightest bit sticky, wasn’t worth teasing her about. Even if it would be a deserved bit of retribution. I let us enjoy the quiet moment just as it was. A light breeze came on in over the water, causing the fabric of her dark skirt to flap gently onto my bared leg. Her voice deepened, her eyes drifting towards the horizon, “Still….”
“It’s a little too late for you to worry about me getting into trouble, don’t you think?”
“It’s different,” she said, “vice president is a big deal. Supposed to be of unimpeachable morals, right?”
I laughed bitterly. An image of a smiling fox came to mind. She forced me into the role, she pulled all the strings from the very beginning. No matter what I did she would make sure that I proved to be a good investment. Even the trip had been….
“Oh, are you making fun of me? It’s bad enough that you’ll be spending so much time with Reimu alone, with those all those council sessions, no need to rub it in—”
Marisa had misinterpreted, but it wasn’t her fault. It was difficult to explain my relationship with that woman. It had been her under her influence and direction that I had gotten involved with Marisa’s problems at the start of the year. I could feel a certain nervous energy emanating from Marisa, as she looked up expectantly—I don’t think it would be fair to call it frustration or irritation, or even jealousy … maybe more like anxiety born from lingering insecurity. Though, perhaps those weren’t really her feelings and it was just a reflection of my own.
[] Even if she couldn’t understand the situation, reassurance would help.
[] Marisa would likely best react to a little lighthearted teasing.
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Back and hopefully I'll be able to resume the daily pace of updates for the duration of the story. I'm giving this a couple of days before proceeding so that people have a chance to see that the story is once again active as well as to best discuss the best way of dealing with a witchlet. As always, your comments are deeply appreciated, as are discussions, and are more important than just voting (see >>69170). A vibe thing, basically, so let's have fun with this panto~
>>69490 First off, congrats on getting back into things.
Second, I just wanna say that your prose is easily the most almond-activating on this site; it's not even a close contest. I love the sensitivity to the psychology of people on display, and the way things have a way of not just being surface-level. I feel like I notice little things every time I re-read.
But, well, I look at the choices and feel kind of dumb. I'm pretty sure it's not just about doing A or B and Marisa having A or B reaction, but I can't say with any confidence that I quite understand what either option really means as far as... I dunno, implications? I mean, I know Theater of Youth had a lot of choices stacking up and influencing things subtly, so I guess I don't want to jump right in and start hitting buttons willy-nilly.
Like, I get that Yuyuko has had a heavy hand in the circumstances being where they are, and Arc is apparently positioned to be vice-prez of the student council, which Marisa seems to feel a certain guilt(?) about given the aforementioned Big Sis' involvement in Arc getting involved in her troubles. So, what does that mean as far as the choices in front of us?
From what I see, the first choice probably has as much to do with Arc trying to soothe himself as anything to do with Marisa. After all, he shows some slight doubts as to whether or not everything he's sensing from Marisa isn't just himself. What could that possibly mean down the line, though? Is it really just Arc playing the nice guy? Is there the chance that this means he'll be more inward-looking down the line? Is he bearing and grinning it when he should be expressing something?
The second choice doesn't feel obvious in its outcome, either. Yes, Marisa will likely laugh and call Arc a dummy or whatever, but how will she really feel? Is it more of an avoidant act on Arc's part than the first choice? Whatever intention Arc does things with, I'm sure Marisa will understand right away; that much is clear from ToY.
Trying to sound it out, I'm still not sure. I think I'm going to have to sit on it for a bit. Maybe other anons can chime in here?
>>69491 If you want more, try reading Theater of Youth.
>>69492 If it helps, I'll say that this story is meant to stand on its own and that a lot of the content thus far is setup for existing relationships/dynamics without it being a summary or explicit information dump. The assumption is that readers aren't necessarily familiar with ToY. Given comments and input by readers in this thread, it seems that it's a reasonable assumption (part of why comments are important for writers.) But, anyways, the greater point is that the past story may well inform context and give people a greater understanding but it shouldn't have much of an influence in practical consequences in this story; I would hope that everything you would need to understand about a character, a choice, and its consequences are things you can glean from these story posts themselves.
... Not very helpful to say, I know, but I don't want to directly intervene one way or another in voting, generally, unless someone is just completely off base and I messed up in expressing what the specific choices mean. Indeed you're right that some of it boils down to guessing how a character feels and whether the perception or expression of those are truthful. The choices are always thought out to mean what the protagonist's actions, intent, or attitude will be in the next update—though not the consequences, necessarily. They are firmly his perspective and what he finds that makes sense in the context. I think that's all I should say without either getting too detailed or being more unhelpfully vague. Would be nice if other voters chimed in with their opinions as the specifics ought to be figured out by you guys.
As for the other stuff, thanks, I'm glad you enjoy my writing and the story! It takes me a long time to think about this nominally silly story and its characters. Have another image that was rejected for use with the update for obvious reasons.
As far as things go, it's obvious Arc doesn't truly get what goes through Marisa's head beyond a certain level, and she probably knows that pretty well. More than that, though, Marisa's shown a willingness to support Arc no matter what, so I don't think this is necessarily a pivotal choice as to her attitude; she's not going to suddenly dislike Arc (or like him more) as a result of the actions taken.
So, all that said, I think that leaves Arc himself. It's clear that the boy is going through something. Despite his usual dashing rogueness, he's hesitating in some way. The way I see it, the former choice is something of a sidestepping manoeuvre, but it still probably requires some acknowledgement of things, whereas the latter seems more like dodging the issue altogether. I think Arc ought to bolster himself at least a little.
[x] Even if she couldn’t understand the situation, reassurance would help.
Not one-hundred percent sure on that decision, though. I might be convinced by discussion to change direction, depending.
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I let go of her hand. Marisa looked a little too serious, and I wasn’t sure what the best way to deal with her was. That I was doubting myself was annoying. That wasn’t my fault nor Marisa’s but, again, it was annoying. Playing things by ear was one of my strengths and, more often than not, I managed to land on my feet. I owed Marisa a lot more but also—
I was going around in circles.
Impulsively, I decided to do something to break the loop. I placed my hand on Marisa’s hatless head, finding that her long golden hair was fairly soft. It smelled freshly shampooed, of something vaguely sweet and fruity. Perhaps the hat had also been meant to keep her fresh, untouched by the drying heat of the sun. I leaned in, partly for effect, and whispered as I tousled lightly, “I appreciate spending time with you.”
“You’re treating me like a kid!” she squeaked more loudly than before, though not entirely with irritation. She gave me a weak push in return, and I made a big show of almost losing my balance. At that display of high buffonnery a smile bloomed on her lips again. The edges of her cheeks were tinged with red. Marisa gave her braid a flick as if to set it back into position and, thinking I wasn’t watching, gave it a quick sniff, seeming to check that her hair remained fragrant. She quickly put on her hat again and tried to act more annoyed than she really was, crossing her arms, shaking her head, and withdrawing back to the shore.
I gave her space but, first, offered a quick little bow. At that she shook her head and turned away completely, and put her socks and shoes back on in a flash. Had there been a wink before she turned? I wasn’t so sure. At any rate, Marisa lightly jogged towards a group that was milling about farther down the shoreline, perhaps looking for the prospective magic club recruit, in the direction of the cabins.
Having cooled off enough, I left the water, put on my footwear, and picked up my stuff. Slowly, without really trying to think too hard about things, I also began to walk towards the cabins. We were to be assigned to different ones according to lists of names we had submitted. I didn’t really care where I ended up so long as no one there snored. Or was a gossip, for that matter. Didn’t need someone blabbing about my comings and goings.
“Took you long enough!” a certain energetic buddy of mine exclaimed, sidling up as I neared the cabins. Where Suika had been hiding was a mystery.
“Felt like getting my feet wet,” I said by way of greeting.
“You were probably playing around again,” Suika said as she poked my ribs. Somehow she managed the exact same spot as earlier and despite her playful tone, I had no doubt that the accuracy was deliberate. A little impressive too, I had to admit. I rubbed the sore spot as she continued happily, pretending not to notice the effect, “It doesn’t really matter. More importantly, I think I found us a pretty good spot.”
“Oh, you were serious about that?”
“I’m always serious!” she furrowed her brow for a moment and poked me in the same spot again. The quick jab somehow managed to bypass my protective hand. I winced but said nothing. “Come on, follow me, you’ll really like the spot.”
Under the threat of more … playful-for-our-usually-more-violent-standards … ribbing, I complied. The cabins would have to wait. Suika led me into the ring of trees that surrounded the immediate area. While it was cooler in the shade, it was also damper, and the smell of earth and plants made me think of mushrooms and of slimy things. Whatever freshness I’d gotten from the brief soak in the lake evaporated fairly quickly. There was no path that I could see but Suika seemed to know the way, confidently maneuvering between trees towards our eventual destination.
“You’re serious about sleeping out here?” I asked as I nearly stumbled over a large root. The sounds of people at the campsite were no longer audible. The stillness of the forest seemed to capture my words, dampening them to just above a whisper.
“It’s a camping trip, so obviously!” she exclaimed, her volume unaffected by the dense mass of trees and plants. “We’re almost there, come on!”
Truthfully, I wasn’t surprised that she had actually gone through with her idea. It was all she had talked about for the past few days, and the oversized pack she had hauled had been filled with the brim with camping supplies and contraband. Wanting to be outside the control of others and living as free as possible … I definitely got that, and that was something that drew us together as friends. Going up to the roof during classes, going out to drink during the week, ditching everything to play around town during the day … those were things that we did regularly. A cabin, a bunk bed that had to be shared with who knows how many others? That wasn’t her style—scratch that—our style. Where others saw delinquency we saw freedom.
“Thinking about that neighbor of yours again?” Suika noted the smile that had crept onto my face as we reached a small clearing.
More ribbing, although thankfully not literal. I denied it, “No, wasn’t thinking about her at all.”
She rolled her eyes as if to say, “Sure you weren’t.”
“This the spot then?” I changed the subject.
“Yeah, pretty sweet, don’t you think?”
It was pretty good. It was a small clearing that featured a large eruption of rock from the hillside that provided a small roof for a space underneath. Already there was a small tent and a half-finished stone circle that would probably serve as a campfire. It had a view of the lake down below and, somewhat surprisingly, to the campsite itself. We were closer than I would have guessed, under a kilometer, but it seemed like a world unto itself—I could just barely recognize a few individuals by the cabins but they would become invisible as the sun set. It was unlikely that they could see us, given how trees otherwise enveloped us.
“You have a knack for finding good spots, I’ll admit.”
Suika enjoyed the praise, putting her hands on her hips as a rather toothy grin broke through her mouth. “Got a bit of booze stashed here too, so you know the drill.”
“Just missing the girly mags. Otherwise, it’s a dream hideout.”
“Who knows, that kind of thing has a tendency of being stashed in the woods. Might want to look under stumps or in the small caves nearby, if you’ve got the heart of a fool that is. Might run into unfriendly wildlife or even monsters who’ll club you and eat your bones.”
“Even a large ogress wouldn’t be a problem for you, right?” I joked. “You’re a real badass and no one’s stronger than you are.”
“Damn right!” she laughed. It came from deep within and sounded coarse and guttural. The self-aggrandizing noise seemed to carry far into the woods, maybe even as far as the lakeside. Perhaps the others would think that it was a wild boar or something like it that was running around in the woods. Already she had produced a can of something—beer?—in her hand and was about to pop the tab open.
It almost made me feel like ditching my responsibilities for a little while.
[] Join Suika for a few drinks and some of the usual merrymaking
[] It would have to wait for another time, there were people waiting at the cabins
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It was difficult to choose the winner here. Tried my best.
Okay, pretty sweet scene. Feels like a reasonable compromise between both options, so I can get behind it.
Now, I wonder how Arc's girl-bro feels at this point in time. The repeated elbowing-in-sore-spots makes me think she might be a little peeved, or at the very least eager to make Arc squirm a little for — I can only suppose — being drawn away from her by responsibilities. Cast in that light, it's almost like spending bro time together might be one of her motivators here. The fact that she obliquely brings up Alice makes me think she might a) know a thing or two about what's going on with them and b) be willing to use it as ammunition in getting Arc's goat.
It'd be easy to shirk the responsibilities Arc has to the student body in favour of mending bridges(?) with his bro. That said, if he did, would he be as 'dependable' as Marisa cast him? After all, Reimu is counting on him to do something resembling his job at some point, no doubt. Plus, there's definitely another purpose behind this whole little escapade, driven by a certain Big Sis, and I can't help feeling like knowing more than a trickle about that means having to duck Suika for the moment.
Man, I'm kind of torn. On one hand, there's probably a lot that can go wrong/right drinking with Suika out in the woods, and she's probably feeling kind of ignored to be so gung-ho about collaring Arc like this. On the other, I feel like being responsible to some degree is warranted, if only because leaving Reimu to shoulder things is kind of a dick move.
Anyone else got a thought about this stuff? I'm gonna need a minute to think.
>Might want to look under stumps or in the small caves nearby, if you’ve got the heart of a fool that is.
I grinned. Well played.
>Even a large ogress wouldn’t be a problem for you, right?
Well, maybe if Arc kept the faith, as a certain sutra indicates, maybe such a figurative ogress might protect him instead.
Incidentally, where's Coach Yuugi? Having no chance with her is a (beast and a) crime.
This seems to be a new low—there's no nicer way of putting it. If things remain as they are, the pacing and style of the story won't really make sense nor will it be viable to keep it going. I'll keep trying for a little while longer regardless.
As for this update, I'll try to decide something? A single reader's non-voting input isn't much to go on.
>>69505 Fuck, I'm sorry, man. I didn't come to a decision last night, and today I was tied up with IRL things longer than I expected. Otherwise, I'd have actually put in a vote.
I really don't want this story to die because it's honestly the only thing I read here.
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Suika was just about to hand me a can when I stopped her.
“Guess I’m not surprised,” she said, shaking her head.
“Later, we’ll have plenty of time. I know of the spot and it’s great.”
“Yeah, yeah, go back to your prissy doll maniacs and tarted-up rich girls,” she prodded, her words acerbic. “Old Suika, your best buddy and patient sufferer of your selfishness will just amuse herself as she usually does.”
“Jackass,” I countered.
“Asshole,” she piled on, but with none of the venom of real anger. She was happy with the spot and probably had expected me to flake right away. While a slightly sad indictment of me, not really unreasonable since she had spirited me away when she knew I had a lot to do.
“… Thanks.”
“Another one you owe me,” she snorted and then spat, before opening up the can in her hand. She had chugged it right away and was in the process of opening up another when I disappeared into the woods, making my way to the lakeside again.
Things were lively back at the main camp. Most of the business of the cabins seemed to have been sorted out and the masses of classmates clustered mainly around the lodge that was by the lake. Impromptu games of this and that—nets being set up and balls procured—raged as the others watched from the shade, sitting on furniture they dragged out from the cabins, on rocks, or even a couple of upturned milk crates. Others talked and joked around, a few clustering around the musically inclined sorts who were casually playing the occasional note while chatting. Beyond them, a number of others had changed into swimwear and were splashing around in the water.
There was supposed to be some sort of program complete with activities for my peers, but I couldn’t see anyone even making an attempt to impose some semblance of order; Reimu was nowhere to be seen—nor the counselor, the doctor, or the others. That, unfortunately, made me the only person even vaguely resembling an authority figure. An incredibly disturbing thought.
Kochiya stood off to one side, with a group that was watching a very haphazard volleyball match that had sprung up at the shoreline. She noticed me just standing there and met my eyes, smiling politely with recognition. Perhaps with a feeling of assurance that I was playing the role of responsible leader, making sure that everyone had settled in properly. That I likely looked overly seriously at that moment, standing and looking around, only further added to my discomfort. I dreaded to imagine how much worse genuine admiration would be coming from my peers. Though I wasn’t sure how, a good portion of me wanted to set the record straight with her.
Whenever I spoke to Kochiya, it was pleasant enough, but it did earn the resentment from her self-proclaimed fanclub—a bunch of weirdos that liked to egg her on to be more competitive, and had run a write-in campaign to have her elected school council president. Whether or not Kochiya had wanted the job herself didn’t really seem to matter much; she hadn’t really been a political rival to Reimu before but still went out of her way to campaign, not wanting to disappoint those who had named her as a candidate. While it would be a stretch to say that there was bad blood between Reimu and her, there was a strange tension there that I couldn't really explain either. Whenever either girl’s name was brought up in my presence, I had gotten a look from both as if I had to produce some sort of opinion about the other.
I noticed another familiar face on the other side of the lodge, in the shade, by where the terrain sloped gently until it met the water. Those pair of eyes were far more mischievous: they looked upon me as an curiosity, as something that was a bother but one that could be handled deftly. She was with her closest friends, the class rep from II-A and gymnast I had tried helping some time ago. Though we had spoken at times, I was never quite sure she was hiding rancor behind her occasional half-smiles.
She tugged at one of the long braids at either side of the head whenever she paused during conversation with her friends and, right after, her eyes would narrow ever-so-slightly and direct themselves towards me. I wasn’t sure what she meant by that. Perhaps the loud laughs that carried over the distance were meant to tease me somehow. Perhaps they were an invitation, a call for me to come over so that she could continue to avenge her friend with a few playful and cutting remarks.
Whatever else could be said about those two, they were at least not overtly hostile like the group of samey-looking lackeys centered around those “bosses” that had taken up between the cabins. Very quickly they had taken those semi-sheltered spaces and turned them into mysterious, smoky alleys with stacks of supply boxes forming walls and limiting access. Three groups in all, they each took up their own space and looked at one another with great suspicion; at me they looked with clear disdain, probably thinking me a nark at best but, more likely, some sort of threat. I wasn’t about to approach them out of the blue as that would be a pointless fight. If Suika had decided to stick around the cabins with me, a brawl would have been inevitable.
[] Talk with Kochiya and liberate her from her fans for a while
[] Engage with Kaenbyou and endure the barbs if need be
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[x] Engage with Kaenbyou and endure the barbs if need be.
I'm curious about who the other two are.
You could always slow down the pace to make up for the lack of votes and use the extra time to work on another story idea? (Don't want to be rude :/)
>>69509 >spoiler text
Don't worry, you're not rude. I hope I'm not either though I'm pretty frustrated and tired, generally. I apologize if I can come off as harsh. I just mean to be direct and succinct because a lot of words have been typed over the years about stories, THP, etc.
There's a couple of reasons why:
1) I do work on story ideas of different sorts (some not even CYOAs) whenever I have time or the mental bandwidth, regardless of doing these short updates.
2) Experience over the years has shown me that a slower pace does not equal more votes nor, more importantly, equal more discussion and comments, regardless of the type of story. See also earlier in the thread where some anon posted a bunch of stuff and over several days no one engaged with them. Or really many, many, many stories on the site including the predecessor to this.
3a) This particular story is structured around quick and short updates. It is why it can have a large cast and have a lot of different things happen without taking weeks or months to get to the next beat. For example, it's quite different to spend 'just' 3 days going from Marisa, Suika to somebody else and getting bits of their respective personalities and stories versus spending two weeks getting to the same place.
3b) And with a slower pace, the updates may as well be longer and also that the choices way more consequential on their own since there probably would be fewer of them. Something that I don't think fits with the design of this story.
4) THP can and should do better. There's plenty of people who nominally enjoy our brand of interactive fanfiction and complain about a lack of activity, or enjoy what I write but don't show up, or whatever else. This story has more or less a hard limit of 1000 words per update and several will come in below that. I genuinely believe if you do care about something like this, you can take 5 minutes to read and say something/vote, even if it's relatively silly nonsense (that you enjoyed a scene, character, want this or that... a single sentence is fine), and enjoy yourself. It certainly keeps me going to hear people getting into things and it certainly helps the site be less dead.
There's more I could say and have said in the past in many threads but I'll stop here. If you disagree or have anything else to say, suggestions or observations or whatever, feel free to say it. I want to do the best job I can with the different stories I write, different as they may be. The reader and their input is central to most of that.
[x] Engage with Kaenbyou and endure the barbs if need be
Clearly, this will lead to Coach Yuugi. You see, given that Orin's friend is a gymnast, all Arc has to do is cosy up to her in any way possible. She will be so taken with Arc that the Coach will spontaneously apparate into the story because reasons, whereupon this affinity with a gymnast will also do its work on her. Q.E.D.
Now that I've got my obligatory joke at some people's expense out of the way...
Kind of sad that Suika was right about Arc ditching her. It just feels bad, even knowing that people have lives, to know when your friends just don't have time for you. Time waits for no one, and all. He really needs to make it up to her somehow.
That said, it was probably a bad idea to be drinking in the woods with Suika. ZUN only knows how that could have bitten Arc in the arse. Besides that, it looks like he has some chaos to (attempt to) sort out in some fashion.
But, man, these choices almost feel like self-punishment on Arc's part — fitting enough, given all else. You've got the catty mondey girl who probably very much wants to cut him down for all that's happened in the past, and the dorky not-Reimu who causes him to get rained with abuse from a bunch of simps.
In the interests of not vacillating until there's no time to vote, I'm just going to try and sound out my reasoning here:
The inevitable simp-missiles may hurt, but they can probably be shrugged off. Also, Sanae is a fucking dork and I love her. Maybe being around her produces tension with Reimu going forward, maybe not. It's kind of interesting if it does, honestly.
...I'm not incredibly firm in that choice, though, so standard disclaimer applies that I could be convinced by others' opinions.
[x] Talk with Kochiya and liberate her from her fans for a while
Also, I just want to say I'm sorry about not getting my vote in in time. I should have decided last night and just fucking posted, but I hesitated instead. Plus, I didn't account for life tending to be life (especially my life) and things taking longer than necessary, so I didn't have the chance to get home before votes closed. It was just shit judgement all around and you got to pay for it. And I know your frustration is about more than just one asshole out of many not voting, but I also know it doesn't help, so I'm still going to apologise.
>>69509 Fast updates with reader feedback has always been the point of the X of Youth stories. They're short and not especially complicated to read. It wouldn't be anywhere near the same experience, otherwise.
Teru otherwise made the point, so I'll leave it at that.
>>69512 Kind of hard for anything to not be politically charged when Arc's vice-prez. Also, pretty sure there's no implication of her wanting anything beyond maybe for Arc to do his damn job.
Not gonna lie, going over to Rin and Okuu (and Satori, iirc) would be a little awkward considering the history.
But at least it doesn't seem too bad.
I wouldn't have minded going over if it was just her, but considering just how much she hovers around Okuu the chances of that happening are slim.
As for Sanae, I just don't like groupies very much.
You can think someone's cool or otherwise look up to them, but don't be pushy about it.
Just going along with it to satisfy expectations isn't very healthy either, but people are free to handle situations in their own way, suppose.
Doesn't mean that we can't see about giving her a breather (and some personal space).
[X] Talk with Kochiya and liberate her from her fans for a while
I've just been far too busy to even check THP (and other places) for the last week or two.
I know myself; if I check, I'm stuck in constantly checking for updates and/or reading backlog and nothing gets done.
So instead I went cold turkey.
It's not really an excuse or anything, but that's just how it is.
I should have time now to properly stay up to date with the story.
If it helps, I do very much enjoy the story. The comfy vibes and characterisation really bring a smile to my face.
But I'm just some random anon; how much my word is worth is debatable.
>>69515 Everybody's word is worth something, friend. That's exactly why everyone speaking their mind about anything and everything is so important to the story.
>>69515 >if I check, I'm stuck in constantly checking for updates
I get that as a reader. As a writer, it's even worse! Silly as it might sound, it's can very anxiety-inducing to check and wait. But, well, I did want to say that there's various RSS feeds available for the site. One for all the updates, for all the posts, and board-specific ones. Aside from that both the Matrix and Discord have channels that get have a bot that posts every time there's an update. Not as good as refreshing like a mad lad, but maybe useful to keep tabs on things at times.
>>69515 >>69517 See also: If you scroll up to the top, in the upper-right corner, there's the 'Settings' button. Under 'Thread watching and updating', there's an option to add posts to the thread as they come in; it's basically a live-update option, and it'll show a number on the tab when there are new posts. Also, you can enable the thread watcher, to which you can add stories you're watching so that it lights up when there's activity/updates. There's lots of options.
It didn’t seem like Kochiya was paying much attention to the conversation that was happening around her. From time to time, she would nod her head or say something innocuous like “Ah, yes,” when asked if she agreed with something directly. Perhaps the subject bored her. Her eyes, limpid but downturned, away from the many faces that beggared her attention instead idly fell into empty space; nominally her eyes were trained at the game and classmates in before her but in practice they drifted with aimless inertia, focusing on nothing in particular, and in their gradual voyage had momentarily come upon me.
Observing as I walked casually towards the group another thought arose: no one was really made an effort to talk with her and instead wanted to talk at her or talk and have her notice their cleverness. I knew what showing off looked like—I was fairly good at that myself!—and it appeared to me that it was indeed a case of one-upmanship among the boys. Preening, joking-but-not-joking about the faults of their friends, it was a transparent attempt to draw attention to themselves. That there were other girls present, joking around and laughing seemed also to be less about Kochiya and more of an attraction to popularity in general.
I felt a little frustrated on her behalf and resented the people around her. That must have been written on my face as I approached; the conversation quieted a down some when I was spotted and inquisitive, suspicious looks with a vituperative edge, were directed at me; as I had spent years being the target of shitty comments and rumors I had developed a thick skin and shrugged off the negative attention. I gave a little nod whenever I made eye contact, as any respectable student council member might do, and relished the muted resentment—though I had no power and much less any inclination towards abusing it, that they thought that crossing me recklessly would have consequences was pleasing.
“Miss Kochiya,” I said a little stiffly, hypocritically leaning into the optics of things. She grounded herself quickly, meeting my appearance with a polite-but-ambiguous smile, the sort that was much-discussed among the type of boys who saw their own favor increasing in her every innocent action. “Might I have a moment to discuss something with you? That is, if you’re not too busy.”
“Oh, no, there’s no problem,” she replied, easily parting with the rest of the group. Seemingly she did not see the hostile looks directed at me. Or, if she did, she hid her own feelings well beneath a practiced mask.
We walked together, away from the group and away from the game, slowly following the shoreline away from the lodge. She held her own hands in front, her arms coming forward and pushing her chest from the sides just a little—something that could have just as easily been unthinking as it could have been deliberately coquettish. Kochiya stopped when I stopped and her eyes wandered no more, instead orbiting solely around me. A heavenly miracle, the other guys would have thought if it had happened to them.
“I’m sorry,” I said a little bashfully, recalling at how seriously she had taken some of my joking in the past, “there was no actual business to discuss. I just thought that you could use a break from that circus.”
“A vice president rescuing one of his constituents? That seems alright,” she said and, for a moment, I wasn’t sure if it was a joke or not. An energetic pull at the corner of her mouth betrayed a more genuine, if not to say odd, sort of smile and clarified her intention.
“It didn’t look like you were having fun. Surrounded by people who aren’t really interested in your opinion on things.”
“I think they are interested,” she said, shaking her head. “They are interested … but maybe wouldn’t be happy with what I have to say?”
“Oh? It’s okay to tell people if they’re being annoying, you know,” I said, fully aware that she could easily turn that on me.
Kochiya crossed her arms over her chest, pressing down on the white cotton material as she gave the matter some some thought. I found it somewhat odd how she wore that coiled snake accessory wrapped around a strand of hair on one side and had a frog-face hair clip higher up; the multicolored string bracelets that she wore around her wrist I got—normal and popular enough among girls her age—but there was something vaguely unfashionable about her hair. That she had not really changed her look despite probably backhanded compliments hinted at a certain stubbornness or ingenuity in her. Perhaps both.
She extruded a bit of air through her drawn lips. Was she deflating or hissing?
“I don’t know how to explain it properly,” she said, keeping her eyes intensely focused on me. Their focused energy might have made someone else shirk, maybe even blush. It felt more innocent than a deliberate affectation but I only thought as much because of our previous, brief, encounters. I couldn’t claim to know her well enough to be certain either way.
“Try your best,” I said, feeling that it would have been a mistake to tease her for her radiating earnestness.
“I, well … don’t you think people find you strange for being confident?”
“They seem to either like it or resent it, but I don’t think they think it’s strange,” I replied.
“Well, with me they do. I say what I’m thinking, what I mean, and get weird looks. It’s always been the same. Like, if there’s a mirage, like there was on the lake when we were arriving, I talked about the refraction because of the atmospheric conditions that made the image and no one really had anything to say about it. In fact, it seemed like they were bothered by my saying that, like it was unnecessary and should just be quiet. But then they all spend so much time around me and keep claiming to want to know me better. And then I end up pushing them away…? It’s been like that since I was little and so I keep quiet and just say small silly things and—“ Kochiya paused after going through a lot of explanation in a single breath. She shook her head and sighed, “Sorry, I’m being weird right now. Like I said, no one really wants to hear what I have to say. It’s rude to impose like that.”
[] If they don’t get it, it doesn’t matter, it’s more important that she engages with topics that interest her.
[] They’re not worth the effort in the first place. They just care about her looks and not her personality.
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The wording of the choice isn't the best, I realize, and there's some overlap too. But if it helps clarify things it's more about how to tell her to not get hung up on the way others act and pigeonhole her.
[x] If they don’t get it, it doesn’t matter, it’s more important that she engages with topics that interest her.
I understand the wording of the choices, I'll choose the more "friendly" option.
>>69509 here:
Reading >>69510 gave me a bit more perspective on things. Notably, I thought vice versa for #2, but I was wrong :/. 3a & 3b was something I didn't consider initially (as I'm not a writer). But, it's good to know that #1 is true.
>Her eyes, limpid but downturned
Love that word. See also: 'pellucid'.
>no one was really made an effort to talk with her and instead wanted to talk at her or talk and have her notice their cleverness I smiled bitterly. Puts me to mind of a lot of things encountered in recent and not-so-recent history. Feels like an ever present state of things anymore in some ways.
>the conversation quieted a down some when I was spotted and inquisitive, suspicious looks with a vituperative edge, were directed at me
>Kochiya stopped when I stopped and her eyes wandered no more, instead orbiting solely around me. A heavenly miracle, the other guys would have thought if it had happened to them.
See, this is part of why I like your writing; incisive word selection is honestly underrated.
>I talked about the refraction because of the atmospheric conditions that made the image and no one really had anything to say about it. In fact, it seemed like they were bothered by my saying that, like it was unnecessary and should just be quiet.
Oof. Sanae is a dork and I love her for it, but damn. That is certainly a feeling.
How fitting for Arc to step right in the middle of things to try and rescue some pretty girl from others and herself. Of course, if he does it too much, things are likely to blow up in his face — and they usually do. But, well, as far as self-punishment, this one seems like a benign one compared to having a certain cat claw at him.
As far as the vote, I'm inclined to feel like the latter is a bit hypocritical coming from Arc, considering he's been more focused on a bit of booba or leg or what-have-you at times. At the very least, it's the kind of thing that's hard to make come across genuinely, especially when you've got the reputation he does. Also, it doesn't feel very good to tell somebody to just disregard people. After all, aren't you a person as well?
On the other hand, I also think the former option is a bit... something. It's the kind of thing that's 'nice' but also kind of crueller than just setting boundaries at the same time. Passive-aggressive? Something of that sort. In any case, I don't jive with it in substance, even if I agree in spirit. I think an extra word on not just shrugging people off is warranted.
[x] If they don’t get it, it doesn’t matter, it’s more important that she engages with topics that interest her.
-[x] Ask her if she's actually interested in student politics. If she's not, she ought to assert boundaries and say so.
[x] If they don’t get it, it doesn’t matter, it’s more important that she engages with topics that interest her.
I read this choice as more of an attempt to appeal to others that you might like something they don't really know. If they're at all a friend then they'd hear out what you're saying, even if it doesn't mean a damn thing to them.
I think the former option gives something resembling a solution to the problem without actually telling her what it is while the latter does the opposite.
[X] If they don’t get it, it doesn’t matter, it’s more important that she engages with topics that interest her.
>>69523 >If they're at all a friend then they'd hear out what you're saying, even if it doesn't mean a damn thing to them.
The thing is, though, that Sanae is kind of isolated in her interests. Sure, you could have people 'hear you out', but what does it matter when basically no one around you shares any sentiment about something you care about? It's a pretty shit existence. In a way, you're expected to do the heavy lifting of caring about what everyone else cares about instead of yourself.
Granted, it's not entirely clear how Sanae feels about that in particular, but I imagine it isn't good.
>>69524 I dunno. I don't think people being superficially interested in Sanae is the problem as much as a manifestation of it. I'm not even sure the former choice is a solution to the same problem, or if Sanae sees the problem the same way as Arc, for that matter. Neither choice is really going to just make every issue go away, for sure.
Oh shit, I went off THP for a few weeks and didn't notice this story continued.
[X] If they don’t get it, it doesn’t matter, it’s more important that she engages with topics that interest her.
Like her canon self, she seems to be a science/physics nerd and that's just what she likes to talk about. Yes, it's not something that many would be engaged or interested in, but I wouldn't say it's fine to outright dismiss others if they don't share her interests.
>Preening, joking-but-not-joking about the faults of their friends, it was a transparent attempt to draw attention to themselves.
Why did you include me here?
>>69522 Well, I would say that there's a bigger emphasis on the "a bit" part. Yes, Arc always seems to be drawn in by the T&A but he's shown to be very considerate of people as they start to open up.
Came for the booba, stayed for the feels.
>>69527 Considerate? Hmmmh, in some situations, maybe. There have quite a few situations where he's been pretty tin-eared. I guess he's managed okay when actually listening to others, but still.
I mean, not knocking him. Just, well, he's not in a secure position to be throwing stones.
See, personally, I would just advise people to not mingle with sycophants at all.
But I also understand that's pretty drastic for most people.
Unless you actually are that kind of Queen Bee Stacy it's better to engage with people who give a shit about what you care about.
Or, failing that, at least don't mind and accept that you have hobbies disparate to theirs.
On the other hand, immediately they only care about her for her looks is rather cutthroat.
Now, I'm jaded enough to assume the worst like that, but Sanae's nicer than that, so I wouldn't immediately resort to such measures.
Keyword: immediately.
In the end, I'd actually suggest both.
First, have her broach topics she cares about.
This'll serve to cull the herd of the groupies that just slap labels on her; might pinpoint some members that share her interests now that the naysayers are gone; and/or being more vocal about her interests might help her find friends even outside the coterie she finds herself in.
On that note, would we know anyone that might get along her that we could introduce? (Nitori?)
Anyway, failing that is when I would suggest going a bit more hard-line: if the bad seeds actively push her to conform to their misguided conception of her, drop em like a sack of potatoes.
You have nothing to gain from those sort of attentions.
But, considering voting "both" would be a cop-out, I'll just vote with how I'd initially approach the problem.
[X] If they don’t get it, it doesn’t matter, it’s more important that she engages with topics that interest her.
-[X] Maybe we know someone who might share her interests? Introduce or at least mention them if so.
>>69529 Mind that a) this choice is about simply telling Sanae something, not dictating her actions or taking any action on her part, and b) we don't actually know how she feels about things beyond conjecture on Arc's part. There's really no guarantee of any particular outcome based on words; Sanae could just as easily ignore what Arc has to say and keep on keeping on.
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“I can’t say that I get it,” I said, trying not to make Kochiya feel any more awkward. Though she kept her bright green eyes on me, it seemed like it was more out of inertia than conscious desire. She did not understand that her naked honesty made her wield an enormous power; it was what attracted the others to her, even if they would struggle to put it in so many words. That subtle thing, that genuine display, called forth a deep resonance that affected those around her. I found myself shaking ever so slightly, trying not to fall into a state of incoherence. So I chose my words carefully, adding, “I might not get it, but it doesn’t matter if I don’t. Same with everyone else. What’s important is that you feel it’s important. There’s nothing wrong with expressing yourself.”
Kochiya blinked, eyelashes fluttering with casual lack of concern. She seemed to think things over, her lips tightening once more but holding off on the release of air for the time being.
I felt like I had to explain myself further. It was difficult to apply a universal solution so casually, without making clear that the devil resided in the details. I said, picking my words carefully, “It’s their loss if they don’t appreciate what you have to say. What you think matters to you and that’s way more important.”
Her slender throat formed a firm curve from chin to chest as she leaned her head forward, as if comprehension would be easier if she were closer to my own face. Though spontaneous, it was a graceful gesture, a dancer’s gesture when making her leg and calf muscles taut moments before a pirouette. I was not sure whether she was trying to perform a choreographed act for my sake or her own.
“What happens after you show yourself … I can’t say for sure. But there’s no real reason to hold back,” I said, feeling like I was close to wincing. I was dumping a lot on someone I didn’t know that well, presuming to speak from a position of experience and authority when I had neither. At least not in her specific circumstances.
Kochiya laughed, as if reading my thoughts. A light timbre, carried for a short distance by the wind before disappearing into the background. “There’s a really serious look in your face, you know,” she said by way of explanation, “I’m not sure if I’m getting scolded or not.”
“Ah, not it’s nothing like that,” I felt the blood go to my head, though luckily not to my cheeks.
“I’m sorry, I didn’t mean to offend.”
“It’s fine if you’re honest with me, I’m just not good at worrying about really complex stuff. I like to just be direct.”
“Being direct, like with Miss Reimu?” she said, right out of the blue. Or, rather, out of that clear green that pressed into my own eyes in a dazzling fashion.
She got my tongue. I wasn’t sure if she was teasing or being genuine … though I suspected that it was more of the latter—how could it not be? If she was being devious then it was a strange moment to start acting that way. Faint embarrassment seemed to gather on the wrinkle just above her well-sculpted nose, manifesting a tension that was otherwise hidden by her bold words.
“Perhaps if she were more direct….”
“They say if that if the gods are too generous with their gifts, they grow jealous. They come to eventually abduct those who are too blessed, giving them the ultimate gift of death.”
I stared blankly at her, wondering what it was that she meant by that. A serious smile, nearly-mocking with its sobriety, bloomed on her face, re-contextualizing the unflinching stare that she continued to drive into me. Another attempt at humor? Was she being true to herself in a way I didn’t get?
“I-I forgot that you were a shrine maiden,” I said at last, the words coming out like a congealed dribble. It wasn’t like that fact explained her oddness, not at all. The obvious contrast of Reimu … well, her strangeness was unquestionable, but it was in a different sort of way. It was in a way I could relate to, could even come to tease her over. Never the strange, disconnected intensity that I felt at the moment.
“Do you think that’s something that the others would understand? Is that a good way of being true to myself?” she asked, her smile static, querying and becoming as opprobrious and penetrating as her stare.
“It doesn’t matter,” I affirmed. “So long as you’re satisfied….”
“What if I won’t be satisfied until you understand?” she asked, her lips parting with an almost bubbly moistness as she said said the word “you.”
“I’ll give it my best, but it doesn’t have to be me, you know.”
She took a small breath and blinked, before speaking at length, “Doesn’t it? You’re one of the few people to ask me about me, so aren’t you my best shot? Sure, I could ask Nitori and a few others but, somehow, it doesn’t feel like it’s the same thing. I just know that if you’re right there’s no real point in talking to most of my classmates—they won’t get it anyhow. I could talk about Lord Tadanao or how data is transferred through phones and it’d be the same blank stares. Your stare, at least, isn’t that. I like it; it’s different; can’t tell you why, though.”
“I don’t mind, but….”
“It’s still a lot, I know,” she nodded. “I’m sorry, I just can’t help but think about how carefree everyone else is about this sort of thing. Like, it shouldn't be a struggle, you know. I’m a little bit jealous of Miss Reimu, I suppose.”
I thought of the class rep’s—student council president’s, after her promotion—typical look of annoyance. Sucking on a thousand lemons wouldn’t get you close to her scowling acidity. “Why would you be jealous of her?” I asked.
“She’s more direct and honest and doesn’t seem to worry about the consequences,” Kochiya said. “If she felt like talking to you about anything, she’d just go out and say it.”
[] She was wrong. Reimu was far more self-conscious than people realized.
[] It was true that the class rep was reckless about expressing herself and getting her way when needed.
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>Though she kept her bright green eyes on me, it seemed like it was more out of inertia than conscious desire. She did not understand that her naked honesty made her wield an enormous power; it was what attracted the others to her, even if they would struggle to put it in so many words. That subtle thing, that genuine display, called forth a deep resonance that affected those around her.
>Her slender throat formed a firm curve from chin to chest as she leaned her head forward, as if comprehension would be easier if she were closer to my own face. Though spontaneous, it was a graceful gesture, a dancer’s gesture when making her leg and calf muscles taut moments before a pirouette.
>Or, rather, out of that clear green that pressed into my own eyes in a dazzling fashion.
>Faint embarrassment seemed to gather on the wrinkle just above her well-sculpted nose, manifesting a tension that was otherwise hidden by her bold words.
>A serious smile, nearly-mocking with its sobriety, bloomed on her face, re-contextualizing the unflinching stare that she continued to drive into me.
Seriously, I love the attention to detail in this story and your other work. I can't 'see' what's being described, but it leaves an impression all the same.
Also, green eyes and ambiguous coquetry are both my kryptonite.
>So I chose my words carefully, adding, “I might not get it, but it doesn’t matter if I don’t. Same with everyone else. What’s important is that you feel it’s important. There’s nothing wrong with expressing yourself.”
>“What if I won’t be satisfied until you understand?” she asked, her lips parting with an almost bubbly moistness as she said said the word “you.”
Kinda feels like Arc got blown out a little in this exchange. He swaggered in like he was going to rescue her and then had his little spiel turned around on him. Guess it's just easy to underestimate how much of a fucking weirdo Sanae is, huh. Not that it wouldn't be fun to listen to her go on about stuff.
But, well, it's not necessarily all negative. Seems like she has some kind of... affinity with? Attraction to? Well, a draw to Arc, in any case.
Seems like she could be a bit of a pain in the arse, though.
So, yeah, given her weirdness, this is a slightly difficult choice to answer. The former feels like it betrays a certain intimate acquaintance with Reimu, which I honestly can't read how Sanae would feel about. The latter doesn't feel that true, though. I guess it's possible that Reimu could be a bit pushy, but I'm not sure how I feel about Arc sort of retreating from his prior position and basically saying Reimu's straightforwardness is a flaw.
Then again, I suppose learning to see when you're wrong is an important quality in a leader.
[x] It was true that the class rep was reckless about expressing herself and getting her way when needed.
[x] She was wrong. Reimu was far more self-conscious than people realized.
I think it's better for Sanae to know just a bit more about Reimu. I don't mean for Arc to blab all about her more intimate moments, but maybe Sanae would be able to reflect a bit with this.
Hm... If I could, I would like to propose an "in-between":
[x] It was true that the class rep was sometimes reckless about expressing herself and getting her way when needed...
-[x] But, Reimu was far more self-conscious than people realized.
If this isn't allowed, I'll choose the latter option:
[x] She was wrong. Reimu was far more self-conscious than people realized.