Vote called in favour of [X] It had been a busy day. Reimu would much rather be asleep right now.!

AAAAH! I've caught up finally!!!!

You're genuinely one of the best writers on the site, Heartkor; Its equal parts inspiring and demoralising. I bless you with good fortune and bountiful inspiration!

Hey all. With university back in session, I don't have the time to work on this as regularly as before (not that I ever hit my self-imposed deadline of every friday, but I don't think I was unforgivably late, either). So updates from now on might be fewer and farther between. Thank you for bearing with me so far!

While I'm here, thank you all for the kind words! I don't directly respond much, but I'm really flattered to hear how much people love my work! It's a lot to live up to.

>>45512
>Its equal parts inspiring and demoralising
If it's any consolation, I get the same feeling, everywhere, constantly. Perhaps it's just part of being a creative?

>>45526 here. Changing vote.

[x] Kosuzu, who should be able to read the text.
- [x] Then *maybe* (if she's not here) we visit the Hakurei shrine/maiden/thingamabob/doohickey.

This better be funny.

>>45521

[x] Kosuzu, who should be able to read the text.
- [x] Then *maybe* (if she's not here) we visit the Hakurei shrine/maiden/thingamabob/doohickey.

Changing votes as well, lots convincing arguments!

[x] Kosuzu, who should be able to read the text.
- [x] Then *maybe* (if she's not here) we visit the Hakurei shrine/maiden/thingamabob/doohickey.

I lean in to take the scroll and roll it up, starting, “Let’s find Akyuu. I have an idea.”

“Nooo I like it down here,” Rumia whines. She slumps against the table in resistance to leaving.

“We’re not leaving you here, kid. Either get up or I’ll pick you up myself,” I threaten. Do I realize that she could snap me in two? Yes, but telling her that Keine will pick her up doesn’t sound quite as demanding.

“Awww,” the little girl feigns a cry, limping to her feet.

I tie the scroll back together and stow it in my pack for later. Akyuu can complain about taking old materials when I return it, but the single source of Rumia’s appearance in ancient history is too important to leave behind.

I see Keine hold some consternation in her expression as I do so.

“What’s wrong, Keine?” I prod her thoughtful eyes.

She looks up from a loose stare, blustering, “No, I just–… Listen, I love and trust you, but I’m also conflicted whenever you claim to have an idea.”

I shut up for a second, taken aback by how direct she’s being. Did I piss her off? I mean… recently, that is. Both her and Akyuu have been batty today. Though, on the other hand, Keine’s also been in higher spirits than I’ve seen her in some time.

I laugh, “Oh come on, you’re exaggerating, here.”

She’s less than impressed by my giddy scoffs, and sighs, “Do I need to list your ideas? Or just the ones that you neglected to tell me about?”

I choke on my laugh. What ideas does she know about? All of them? From her power? Did Ran tell her in confidence? That’s more than a little worrying to hear without context.

“Can I hear about them?” Rumia casually solicits the teacher.

“No, child. I’d rather you not attempt to replicate any of them, lest you should follow his example.”

I take offense to this, especially, “I am not a bad example, Keine. I’d argue that I am a stalwart example of pragmatic virtues.”

She remains silent for a moment before turning to th

>>45107
Thanks. It's good to know about the range. My previous vote still stands though. I don't think splitting up is a good idea.

[X]Follow Kokoro inside the bar and ask around. While she had the captain's good graces, it was a golden opportunity to get information.

{X} Ask Kogasa to keep watch outside. She did have two sets of eyes, after all.

Would be bad if one of us will disappear.

[X]Follow Kokoro inside the bar and ask around. While she had the captain's good graces, it was a golden opportunity to get information.
{X} Ask Kogasa to keep watch outside. She did have two sets of eyes, after all.

[x] “Fine, drag me away for all I care. I’d love to see you come up with a better idea.”

[x] “Fine, drag me away for all I care. I’d love to see you come up with a better idea.”

We've come to the bottom of the page once more. I wonder how many notebooks we've filled by this point?

New thread: >>45332

>>45249

You do realize that both of those are simply facts of life for writers, right? I've also had some pretty depressive moments in terms of confidence in my own writing, and I absolutely know that there are parts of USiL I could have written far better.

This really is just a fact of life - when you're writing a first draft without the ability to go back and edit, you're going to make choices you wish you could undo. I've never had a story where this didn't happen, and it's always frustrating - you just have to live with it and keep writing.

And for the record, outlines may or may not help depending on what kind of writer you are. It's worth a shot, but I know I personally can't stick to one to save my life.

Just remember that people are in fact reading what you're writing, and they care enough to comment that they hope you keep going. You're not a bad writer, Maxis, you just need to keep at it until you figure out what you're doing with your characters. If my own efforts are any indication, you'll eventually find a point where your depictions of Yukari/Reimu/etc. have solidified into something within the range of canon but just a little distinct, a touch of uniqueness that makes them your characters, and you'll find writing and planning a lot easier from there.

>>45250

I should elaborate on my reply: When I said "how much I appreciate," I meant somewhere between "quite a bit" and "a whole lot," and I definitely did not mean "not at all" or less.

Also, I'm not upset as in a-word-meaning-sad, I meant as in "I'm furious with myself for letting this happen." "This" meaning I let Reimu's ability and personality of floating infect the plot when it was just supposed to be in the narration. And when I tried to correct it, just like Reimu, I got suckerpunched by an unexpected danmaku/Yukari saying "I'm adopting you."

And don't worry, I don't think I'm a bad writer; in fact, I have the opposite problem where I KNOW I'm a GREAT writer, but I just make bad decisions (egomaniac)! I KNOW EXACTLY WHAT I'M DOING; I'M JUST SCREWING IT UP!

And! It's hilarious. You'd have to meet me in person to truly, TRULY understand, but I really wish I could get across just how upset-but-actually unbothered I am. "Screw it, we ball," is the only way I can think to describe it, but it's not enough. That and my image. Come Hell or high water, I'm gonna write a Reimu and Yukari relationship I like a lot more than the inspiration! Also, I was gonna say something about Jerma, but I don't know how to word it exactly, so...! There!

The day after Reimu visited Aya, Kasen came stomping up the shrine steps. The shrine maiden winced at the furious look on the hermit’s face. “H—”

“YOU FLEW INTO THE TENGU VILLAGE?!” she roared.

Reimu felt like she was facing down a tiger, but she still had to defend herself. “What?! I didn’t even do anything!”

“YOU FLEW… INTO THE TENGU… VILLAGE!”

“What’s the big deal?!”

“Reimu, do you even know how incredibly territorial the tengu are?!”

“N-no, not really…”

Kasen put her face in her bandaged hand and sighed. “Did you learn nothing from Ms. Kamishirasawa as a child?”

The shrine maiden ground the toe of her shoe into the stone pathway as she stared at her other one. Reimu didn’t feel like that was a very fair thing for her to say. She could read and write. And she knew how to exterminate any youkai.

“Not only that,” Kasen continued, “but you fought the guards!”

“They were in the way!”

“Of course they were in the way! Do you know what a guard is?! Do you even know what a guard does?!”

She looked away ashamedly. “N-no…”

“What? I can’t hear you when you mumble.”

“No. …I don’t know what a guard does.”

Kasen’s face went from angry to shocked. “Are you serious…?! Did nobody teach you these things?” When the shrine maiden didn’t respond, she continued. “Didn’t your parents explain anything to you?” At the word ‘parents,’ the girl’s lip started trembling, and a sharp pain pricked at her eyes. “Reimu? Are you alright? …I… I didn’t mean to make you upset.” Kasen reached out to her, and she swatted her away before rushing back toward the shrine. “R—! Reimu! I’m sorry!”

The girl threw herself into her futon, wondering why she had to be punished just for doing what she was told. She felt a hand on her shoulder. “I’m sorry, Reimu. This is my fault.” She turned to see Yukari sitting beside her, leaning on one of her hands.

“You

[x] No need to make her do something she’s not comfortable with. If I have to nix the idea then so be it.

[x] No need to make her do something she’s not comfortable with. If I have to nix the idea then so be it.

Honestly, being given the choice NOT to do it when Wakasagihime clearly isn't too comfortable to do so just makes it rather clear to not do it. Besides, we already kinda messed up with Kogasa and it's a lesson to take to heart.

A double update?! No, a new thread! It it time for us to leave behind the chapters of the rainbow warrior and the forgotten umbrella. Let us remember them as we go into the next chapter's journey with the mermaid.

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